Briefly, the first piece was worded effectively and as a result it read much smoother than the latter. The author did a great job of painting a mental image for the reader and although I wasnt particularily fond of how certain parts of the story seemed to contradict others(the bear being lost/thrown while 'Billy' concludes that he thinks it's in a better place) or the ending in general, the verse as a whole was both engaging and enjoyable.
The second writer utilized an impressive vocabulary to compose a verse that was much more realistic and straight-forward, however their scheme-work and presentation was fairly bland, which resulted in a more-complex, but overall less entertaining read.
MVGT: Verse 1
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"Im an animal, scrap n youll get mauled n left w/ battle wounds from the jaws of an alpha wolf"
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