[J u s T C]

Mani.

Beat

Not a beat I woulda personally picked because the hook sections too intrusive for a diss track. it feels like it's popping up every 30 seconds, but for a diss track it had the potential to be something killer with the Final Countdown opening and hook sections, just a shame it kinda contracts itself because it comes into play so often like I said.

A beat like Supahypes only with more personality and oomph woulda been better. Like Phils dissing benson using the Jada beat. No hooks just raw bars. Or if it has a hook section it isn't so obvious it MAKES you feel like you have drop into a hook yourself or if it does it doesn't pop up so damn often feeling like it's more hook than bars.


Bars/hook/quantity

Bars weren't really hitting as far as a diss. You really need to hit where it hurts. even throw them super low blows when making diss tracks. And that requires either doing some dirt digging or knowing your targets well from the jump.

You've been gone for a minute so I'm pretty sure you don't know Punk from adam and from what I know you've had other shit pre occupying your mind to be doing that kind of homework on him.

I get that but that will and does make your diss tracks suffer, It makes you fall back on generic material like nameplays that I'm sure you're aware have been done a thousand times over. Like the AC's air conditioner line. Or Mani Fresh lines. Especially when you've been away from battling/this site for so long.

If you don't have personal dirt to flip, don't have time to dig for it and have not battled for a long time. This is the result.

You probably woulda been better off putting ya Punk beef to 1 side and made a regular track instead because even though you haven't been battling, at least you've still been making music.

It woulda been more in your "comfort zone"


Or

You probably shoulda stuck more to the drake angle and kept it focused all while clowning what little you know about him. You coulda come up with a ton of angles to poke holes in that side of his character

THE HOOK.

This leads onto quantity, because your verses were so short and abrupt it made a hook made for small doses lose it's charm and start to grate. I know the verses were longer but it felt like you spent as much time spitting ya hook as you did the verses because they were so short. Thats great for a regular track but diss tracks are all about the verses. So in a way the hook worked against you when you take into account you had so little room to get into your stride on your verses. They never picked up momentum.

Disses are supposed to leave the listener thinking oh shit this guys really putting him on blast. To do that the verse needs to get out of first gear and gradually reach 4 and 5th. yours never got out of first.

Also going after Jack was a bad idea. especially when you had such little room to breath with the verses.


^ I guess that covers quantity too.

Delivery

It was up and down. Now I don't know if that's a mixing thing or not because it's not your flow, it's your pronunciation. It could be part mixing and part writing or just all the latter because not structuring your bars correctly can force you to mispronounce the words or slur them. which is the main problem here.

It's like 80 or 90% of the delivery is fine. But then you'd get parts of that 10 20% where you slur or it was slightly off pace and it was always at the key parts. Like when you're trying to make a play on words or right at the end of the bar after a cleanly pronounced previous bar. It kills the impact because it's hard to make out exactly what it is your saying.

I'm pretty sure you're aware of this though tbh

Mixing

Again I'm not really bothered other than if it's maybe having an effect on how your delivery comes across. Which I've already mentioned. But other than that 20% and maybe having a negative effect on the hook the mixing was straight on the verses.



Drop Punks soon and my vote

[J u s T C]

Mani.

Beat

Not a beat I woulda personally picked because the hook sections too intrusive for a diss track. it feels like it's popping up every 30 seconds, but for a diss track it had the potential to be something killer with the Final Countdown opening and hook sections, just a shame it kinda contracts itself because it comes into play so often like I said.

A beat like Supahypes only with more personality and oomph woulda been better. Like Phils dissing benson using the Jada beat. No hooks just raw bars. Or if it has a hook section it isn't so obvious it MAKES you feel like you have drop into a hook yourself or if it does it doesn't pop up so damn often feeling like it's more hook than bars.


Bars/hook/quantity

Bars weren't really hitting as far as a diss. You really need to hit where it hurts. even throw them super low blows when making diss tracks. And that requires either doing some dirt digging or knowing your targets well from the jump.

You've been gone for a minute so I'm pretty sure you don't know Punk from adam and from what I know you've had other shit pre occupying your mind to be doing that kind of homework on him.

I get that but that will and does make your diss tracks suffer, It makes you fall back on generic material like nameplays that I'm sure you're aware have been done a thousand times over. Like the AC's air conditioner line. Or Mani Fresh lines. Especially when you've been away from battling/this site for so long.

If you don't have personal dirt to flip, don't have time to dig for it and have not battled for a long time. This is the result.

You probably woulda been better off putting ya Punk beef to 1 side and made a regular track instead because even though you haven't been battling, at least you've still been making music.

It woulda been more in your "comfort zone"


Or

You probably shoulda stuck more to the drake angle and kept it focused all while clowning what little you know about him. You coulda come up with a ton of angles to poke holes in that side of his character

THE HOOK.

This leads onto quantity, because your verses were so short and abrupt it made a hook made for small doses lose it's charm and start to grate. I know the verses were longer but it felt like you spent as much time spitting ya hook as you did the verses because they were so short. Thats great for a regular track but diss tracks are all about the verses. So in a way the hook worked against you when you take into account you had so little room to get into your stride on your verses. They never picked up momentum.

Disses are supposed to leave the listener thinking oh shit this guys really putting him on blast. To do that the verse needs to get out of first gear and gradually reach 4 and 5th. yours never got out of first.

Also going after Jack was a bad idea. especially when you had such little room to breath with the verses.


^ I guess that covers quantity too.

Delivery

It was up and down. Now I don't know if that's a mixing thing or not because it's not your flow, it's your pronunciation. It could be part mixing and part writing or just all the latter because not structuring your bars correctly can force you to mispronounce the words or slur them. which is the main problem here.

It's like 80 or 90% of the delivery is fine. But then you'd get parts of that 10 20% where you slur or it was slightly off pace and it was always at the key parts. Like when you're trying to make a play on words or right at the end of the bar after a cleanly pronounced previous bar. It kills the impact because it's hard to make out exactly what it is your saying.

I'm pretty sure you're aware of this though tbh

Mixing

Again I'm not really bothered other than if it's maybe having an effect on how your delivery comes across. Which I've already mentioned. But other than that 20% and maybe having a negative effect on the hook the mixing was straight on the verses.



Drop Punks soon and my vote