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View Full Version : yo! my best verse EVER!!! VS. RED MYST


Prose_
01-21-2011, 07:58 PM
this is wat i sent him. please read and comment...

ima a killer! this SONS PROOF! ima have this CUNT MOVED cause after Cold Reigns Down, these bitches Fall Back like SUNROOFS (cold rains)! make like a plumber and clear ya PIPES DAME cause i SWIPE LAMES without the HYPE MAYNE! only time Myst Next To Cold is when we talkin bout his SNIPE AIM (missed cold! ha!) get at me! WHAT? YOU WAITIN? FUCK NOOBS HATIN and ya group cause ill CHUCK CREWS PLAYIN and have them hangin on My Every Last Word, like PUNCTUATION! he's about to break! SNAP!!! MYST BROKE! im like jack the rippa! kill then WRAP THIS BLOKE! his flow is TAPPED! SHITS WROTE! when i drop, its like i got Weed In My Ass! CRAP IS DOPE! always droppin DIMES with EXPENSIVE RHYMES cause you know my PEN IS FINE! hop over ya Built Forces! DA FENCE IS/"DEFENSES" CLIMBED cause my notebooks on NFL mode! full of OFFENSIVE LINES!

Prose_
01-21-2011, 08:06 PM
fuck i hate not havin enough cred for people to actually read my shit but wateva. bump.

StepTo-
01-21-2011, 08:15 PM
Your defense line was the nicest one.
If you can make that good of a verse then you'll have something going for ya.
The other lines were just reall light, nothing stood out for me.

only time Myst Next To Cold is when we talkin bout his SNIPE AIM

I didn't get that at all. No hate.

But hopefully someone with more skill comes in here and talks about your verse.

Prose_
01-21-2011, 08:27 PM
ite. one more bump for hopes of a vet gettin on this.

AceCope
01-21-2011, 09:19 PM
yeah ending was killer! Have to see his to tell you how it'd swing. You have the right idea, just don't rush or force. Relax a lil...You Cold, no doubt...but don't force ya'self on it.

Lizman
01-22-2011, 01:05 AM
And Bye