on some pre tourny shit..

[Po a Fo]

anyone got feedback for me.. dropped this open a lol bit ago, drop a vote if you want but I'm more importantly tryna get a little feedback, no crew so i ain't got a leader to ask for once... so what's good with it??

oh yeah


http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_details.php?section=tb&id=353316

[Po a Fo]

what's good on it lb??

[Odd God]

^advice, drop like that all the time

[CounterCulture]

Okay, I'm finna get on my soapbox here.

1. Your flow is okay, but could get a lot better. You gotta work on your multies, they are wayyyyy over-forced and often contain shit just for the sake of rhyming. "Criminalistic treasure chest". Really?? Who talks like that?? An adverb used as an adjective?? No.

2. Up either your similies, metaphors, or ideas. Your shit also don't really go along with your setup.

Honessssstttllllllllyyyyyyyyyy.........

For the tournament?? You'd be lucky to make it pas the first or second round.

[UnEtHıCaL]

^What he said.