Feedback on my bars I was supposed to kill BarzILLa with.

[calligraphist]

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

[X-Calibur]

You'd have got served .... With that verse go look threw the tutorials and look up Dono and his videos ....

[calligraphist]

Yeah Yeah, ride his dick

[Row]

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

ass. you're welcome & anytime :high:

[NatsHubby]

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.

Garb

Thank you come again

[Wonderbred]

>asks for feedback
>turns into a whiny bitch when people give him feedback


Seriously, if those are the lines that you were supposed to kill BarzILLa with, then this is the lotto ticket I was supposed to win a million dollars with.

[stricc]

hands down some of tha worst shit to hit lb and lb has had some pretty bad shit come thru

[AfterThought]

Yeah that was garbage.

Keep elevatin tho. :high:

[Shodan]

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles

[Silver Dollar Sam]

I wonder if this is what daddio sees when he reads our battles


^^^^ :D lmao...true

---------- Post added at 02:44 PM ---------- Previous post was at 02:19 PM ----------

Illa got incoherent lines, no bars.
Hands commence battery,Get his phone confiscated, no bars.
The 4 leaves a red dot on ya face, Lil bitch yr new home is in-the-urn/Indian, Therefore leave a red dot on ya face.
U suck dick to reserve ya spot on tha game. U a fake ass queer,
I'm gud wit rap, also batter wit hands like a puppeteer.
Half a dozen of adolescents on a bungee, I'm dropn sixTeens,
U wuldn't make em throw dey hands/hens up if dey had chickens.
U'l leav me wit no bruise/bru's like kilin my siblings. U a sweet rapper, I hit u wit a Van Illa,
U must be tyin ya laces, cuz u reachin for Defeat nygga.
Had to talk u to this fight, Jerry Springer. Its sad my bru, u been here yet never dropped anythin hot,
U battle newbies just to reserve yr spot,
See u do this out of boredom, with least passion,
I called u out, u was carried away like a sick person,
But u saw ma Barz Illa, you thought of changin your pseudonym.
U kno I'm mad wit rhymes, bad with knives,
Guns? I grab the Nina, make that ho put u to sleep like a caring wife.


Noone was gona die offa this fam. Take criticism and keep elevating boi...

Yo....BarzILLA you lucky fuck lmao....:D

[Subreal]

Ya'll acting like it takes good bars to kill barzilla with tho...

[Silver Dollar Sam]

Ya'll acting like it takes good bars to kill barzilla with tho...

Itta take more than that atleast lol....:D

[Subreal]

Itta take more than that atleast lol....:D

Yea ur right ""now they call this faggot GIGGLES because when he WIGGLES I'll let him feel how WARM the GUN IS (Worm)" - Barzilla.

Only quotable i always remember from this site

[Silver Dollar Sam]

Ayyyyyyyyeeeee #Cantwatch! Ok yeah thats memorable.

[Obey]

If quoting my key styles is what pays your bills keep at it troll

Anyways, it wouldn't take much to kill me, Im still learning this text battling shit, takes a man to admit it rather then sit in the forums active as hell but when it come to the battle grounds you a ghost Subreal

In audio Im trying to work on delivering bars, text im trying to work on the flow and for my set ups to follow thru with punches, it all takes time, just cause I keystyle up a verse in three minutes aint mean shit

Theres always gonna be the constant haters on the site and Ive learnt to cope with that, shits light work, tips and pointers our helpful but all out hate on someone online is a bit faggish and that's why I don't respond to that shit

The only reason you're not learning is because you're too focused on sniping. Accept some challenges, only way you'll learn. You're putting out 40 battles a month and haven't fixed any problems, do you see a pattern?