Master-Mind (0-0) Vs Wigsplit (0-0) - (Wigsplit Wins 5-4)

[Hubert Cumberdale]

This match up is part of The Inkwell PPV.
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Undercard Match Up
Master-Mind Vs Wigsplit

Topic: Mind of a Maniac

Good Luck.

[Hubert Cumberdale]

Master Mind

Mind of a Maniac

He opened up his eyes took the gun straight from the closet,
Once the evils in his mind its far too late to stop it,
His mind went back to the last time he popped it,
Shot his own brother whilst his mothers sitting opposite,
He looked straight in the mirror with such evil eyes,
Noone will ever feel the pain and the grieve inside,
He needed motivation, a need to survive,
Smiling from the violence when they pleeded and cried,
His wall was filled with pictures of all his victims with a line through it,
Still he still walks away with no convictions he just smiles to it,
Hed never cry for help his mother was never there for a portion,
So many times he wished that shed considered abortion,
He never met his father he felt nothing but extortion,
Felt nothing but like a loner whilst his doner would ignore him,
This is the only way he knows how to take revenge,
Cause when he looks at his life its just far too late to make amends,
So he picks up the gun ready to kill if his heart could,
Decides not so he takes a trip down to the dark woods,
Rolling at 5 miles per hour down the slow lane,
When he finally decides to point the gun to his own brain,
Thinking "why live when im a cold hearted killing thug with no game!"
As much as he wants to care, he feels absoloutly no blame,
Its all down to his father with no pictures or no name,
He points the gun inside his sad mouth,
Leaves a note saying he wants to be burried right by his dads house



Vs


Wigsplit

Mind of a Maniac

Dear Diary,
Its dark in my mind, thoughts hidden deep/
My heart isn't kind, often skipping beats/*
When girls walk by, I find that I'm thinking/
What she looks like naked, chained up in my basement/xxx
I don't smile a lot, people just disgust me/
Maybe it's just me, it must be, my attic it is dusty/
My hatchet it is rusty, and kind of blunt too/
But if I smash it in her pussy, it just might cut through/xxx*
I don't want to sit and chatter, rather split and splatter/
None of these bitches matter, batter, stick and lather/
It puts the lotion on the skin, or else it gets the hose again/
Dump these corrosives down her throat and watch her erode from them/xxx*
Nothings copasetic, hopes pathetic/
Grotesque n dead shit, is what I go to bed with/
Soaking wet dick, fresh blood from her asshole/
Roast up that shit and eat it like a mofuckin cassrole/xxx
Abused when I was little, so now I return the favor/
And beat these fucking girls til, they shout for their lord and savior/
What's wrong with me? I'm not quite sure/
Catch me creeping, when the nights pure/Xxx
Looking for a virgin to cut up like a surgeon/
Make her drink detergent, cleanliness is urgent/
Don't like when their submissive, like to put them in submissions/
Hook em like we was fishing, breaking teeth is an addiction/xxx
Make them suck my dick with bloody gums/
Then I fuck them hard so everybody cums/
When everybody's done, their useless to me/
No more cherry in her fun, juiceless to me/xxx
Red nectar I lust for, it feels so good on my lips/
Feels so good when it drips on my dick from her slit/
She fights me, it excites me... Am I a maniac?
The person raping me took my sanity and never gave it back/xxx
I know what it's like to hurt and be hurt/
I've grown to like them both, so I insert then dessert/
I'll eventually be caught, my days of fright done/
Who knows when tho... Well, I'm going for my night run/xxx
Wigsplit

[Aggo]

Both were pretty good verses but my winner I felt had a better flow and feel and more importantly I felt really did a good job of connecting with the topic. That was maniacal.

Winner: Wigsplit

[Dysfunctional]

Now In my opinion this one is closer in my opinion than some may think here's how I see it:

MasterMind: Your idea was ok the story telling aspect though was quite brilliant. How you explained how the person became maniacal was really well done. I would liked a different appraoch at the title though that would've been can't come up with and example at the moment but like flipping the words to make the title mean something else.

Wigsplit: You took a more unique ( structure wise) approach at this topic with the diary entry structure well done for that. You were pretty descriptive but I didn't catch much of a story in yours which is what i think makes a topical a topical. There was a story but you didnt get that deep with it you should've gone deeper.

Overall: Both did really well for what I believe to be there first topical. I'd give it high 7 to low 7.
Winner: Master Mind

[I AM EGO]

For me Wigsplit may have been a bit too explicit for my liking.. But that's just personal preference so I'm not going to judge based of that, since the topic is Mind of a Maniac.
I think one slightly edged it, taking a kind of "Dance with the Devil - Immortal Technique" feel and I really like that. Both really really dope, rhymes on point. Though I think wigsplit could extend some multis because at some points I have to read back because I was reading words into the multis that actually weren't.. If that makes sense. Great battle.
Winner: Master Mind

[WHITZ]

Master Mind came in the game proppa wit the topical.. Had a good flow throughout, nice storyline and ending. kept it all on topic.
Homie on the other end though, I wasn't really digging the creeping rapest type shit he was going with..
you both came through and participated in the event.. props for creating something for readers
My vote though goes to Master Mind.

[Revan]

Man while i enjoyed both verses i found myself with a clear winner. MM i thought you had moments of real highs with some nice quotables, altho there were a number of issues with the flow, some broken multis too which was the cause of said problems. I think the lenght of the topical hurt the story you were telling. With another 20 lines or so i think you'd of really been able to flesh it out a lot more. Wiggy you crazy sonofabitch. You have trouble with consistancy i find, and you can jump from a poorly written line straight into a crazy one in a second. If you worked on your consistancy you'd be a major problem. I think one embodied the topic alot better, and just had the more impressive verse overall. Both have made a mark tho.

MVGT: Wigsplit.

[Hubert Cumberdale]

Master-Mind, I'm not sure if that was a twist at the end or not. If it was, it seems to have evaded me this time because I didn't really get the relation to his dad's house. You did an alright job of continuing on the story, but I felt you were let down a bit by broken multis at the beginning and some grammatical issues. The story was alright. I've seen what you can do though, and I don't feel you lived up to your potential with this drop.

Wigsplit, this was written for that "A Serbian Film" shock value. You didn't really have a storyline or twist. You focused completely on trying to get a reaction out of the reader, which I don't think was the best road to go down. Lyrically you did a pretty good job, but I think if you want to compete, you're going to have to utilize all of the aspects you've become known for writing instead of as basic and straight forward of a verse as this.

Overall, I feel both could have made this a great one, but I don't think either performed at the top of their game. I think the only thing to split it is that one was a little bit more impressive lyrically, so they get my vote based on that.

Wigsplit GETS MY VOTE

[InCizion]

Master Mind
Your flow was nice (simple) I thought you could have attacked the topic a bit more.. The story took to long to build... 25 lines is not much for a story and you needed some harder hitting situations...IMO.... Nice ending to your story....

Wigsplit

I really wish people would stop using the ////// there is no need for that anymore... as long as you format your drop right the ////// is irrelevant. As far as your drop go's... I like how you attacked the topic better than MM.... your flow was real easy to follow because of your shorter lines... it had more of a hip hop feel to it where MM was more like poetry (if that makes sense)....


Vote Wigsplit.... BOTH DROPS WERE NICE AND IT WAS A CLOSE BATTLE!!!

[Black Book]

Master-Mind your verse had nice flow and vocabulary. The rhyming and wording were also smooth, but I feel you took this topic down a very predictable path. A killer with a troubled past who is battling his psychotic mind and the urge to kill but then ends up killing himself instead. It has been done a ton of times. So you have the fundamentals, now you just need to up the creativity and story making. You got great potential, though.

Wigsplit like I told Master-Mind, you took a predictable route too. The rapist/murderer who was raped as a child and it turned him into the monster he is. I understand this topic sort of guided both of you in predictable/played out directions but still it could have been more original. However, your flow, rhyming, and imagery in this piece were very nice. The imagery was the best aspect of it all. Really painted the dark picture it was aimed to.

Vote: I vote for Wigsplit, both took it in a predictable direction but had the good elements besides originality in the story. However, I feel Wig had a more enjoyable piece which got it for me. Good job both of you. Both have great potential.

[Lockhart]

I have to disagree with InCizion a little bit here because the purpose of a topical is to show the poetic side of hip-hop, so once I started reading MM's verse I was immediately drawn in to it because of how real the story seemed. It also flowed very well and it was pretty good in terms of progressing through the story. Wigsplit I felt you definitely had a more recognizable flow, but there were some instances to where wanting to stay with the flow actually hindered your developing of the story and it turned into more of just a cypher to me. I felt both had really good topicals, but I'm going with the one to where I felt he brought the story out more. My Vote: Master Mind.

[Hubert Cumberdale]

Wigsplit WINS 5-4

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