Letsbeef Topical Magazine: Issue #5

[Hubert Cumberdale]

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The semi finals are over as we mark the beginning of the FINAL. I know some of you are big fans on Writer 2, and have been loyal for quite a while, but I wouldnt sleep on Writer 1. He's the dopest writer since Writer 14, so, I'd watch out if I were you guys. Alright, that's enough of that nonsense. I really enjoyed our two semi finals match ups. Voting was solid, but I think the biggest thing to talk about isn't even the tournament. We're starting to get people getting involved in topicals without me forcing them to. If I could only get a girl to engage in sexual intercourse in the same way, it'd be wonderful. We've seen two go open for votes already, with another two waiting for votes. It's looking like this might be easier than I expected.
Also, a slight update on the PPV; I already have 6 verses in my inbox for PPV topicals, so it will be pretty awesome when we start being able to get these up.
In the future, the audio topical tournament will be more integrated. It kind of came out of nowhere and I didn't know what was going on with it. With future ones, I'll update the magazine with it as well and it will hopefully be held in here.


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Iron Mike
One again, Iron Mike defends his title as voter of the week. It was a toss up between Mike, Streetz and Black Book, but the fact that Mike's votes were centred on the tournament battles, which at this moment in time is the priority, I give him the nod this time. Although, I wish someone else would do this so I could win.


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Writer 1


I do not know Mohammedeen

The image you hold of the street market scene
Shows the last place I know that my father was seen
On August 14th of 1983
It was taken two days after he said to me

“Rajan, my son, in my life I have learnt
That all melts to ash when one’s bridges are burnt
The silent man’s rage swells from whispers to sirens
His victimhood dies with a vengeance and violence.”

The words clouded the air until mother returned
Placed her change on the table, the wage that she’d earned
“Where is your Pappi? How long must we wait?
He’s been out of himself, ill-at-ease just of late.”

Seconds went to minutes to hours to days
Our fear moved from worried to angered to dazed
It wasn’t like Pappi to get up and leave
Then we waited so long Mutti started to grieve.

I showed pictures to strangers who withdrew in derision
Until one pointed up to a small television.
My father’s tired face shone out from the screen
As the writing said ‘Manhunt for Mohammedeen’.

The story showed deaths from a Jihadist plot
But the leader escaped – “But my father was not
Even of Muslim faith!” I angrily protested
Then suspicions were raised and I too was arrested.

I was beaten and questioned, the evidence shown
“Your father, it seems, was a man you’d not known.”
Pappi, quiet Pap, had a dark other life
We were just his Sikh cover, a son and a wife.

Mother wailed in shame that was tinged with denial
While ‘Mohammedeen’s’ brothers were sentenced to trial
“He is NOT Mohammedeen, he is NOT, it’s not true!
He is Rohinder Lall, and a Pappi to you!”

The desolation got no better
For weeks, and then I received a letter
Containing the photograph you see,
Anonymously sent to me.

He’s the white-shirted man on the picture’s top-right
His face the lone dark in a market of light
See the people’s faces, mostly locked into smiles
Yet the frown on my father’s face only beguiles.

I remember his words, like prologue to a mission
Yet his face is not showing Jihadist condition
His frown to me looks like he’s lost deep in thought
Like he’s thinking of lessons his long life has taught.

He said to me ‘rage swells from whispers to sirens’
That his victimhood ‘dies with a vengeance and violence’
I think back to his lap, sitting warm in his kindness
The manhunt goes on as I ponder in silence.


Vs



Writer 4 (InCizion)




The Set Up

Phang was apart of the local gang, he’s a social stain that always a total pain
Game recognizes game, so Phang keeps that hopeful gain his boastful claim
Drained are the names of any lame that’s a vocal strain to his gloatful name
Phangs proposals claim that he’s mobile chain who seeks all the global fame
Life burns like Chernobyls flames, strife carries concerns from mofo Urkrains
Mad feeling so so, trained to see everything that brings any ho or foes frame
That’s why
Mr. Chans on that mission, Another crooks discription cuz Triads are to vicious
Chan keeps hold tradition, he looks suspicious, eyes sad & way to auspcisious
Damned & imprissoned, he stood in a malicious place where guys have wishes
The plans are still a vision to hook them like fishes, times about to be judicious
The Scams in place, pricision is booked, it’s time for dip shits to die like bitches
Black Dragon Clan rips shit like incisions, so misses never describe business
Times tickin
The Urkrains just walked slowly, one seems to look around to mock knowningly
Dhrakes half cocked and holding a peace openly, locked, stocked & heroically
The tame laugh, not knowing that war creeps boldy towards their shops coldly
Both gangs are trapped, the cops are patroling streets and will stop hopelessly
The exchange is mapped, both drops are supposedly to meet, it’s hot and toasty
Plans can change or collapse, squads are aproaching me but not knowing me
I’m a spy &
They don’t realize, I’m a spy from an organization ran like a corporate nation
Disguised as a guy that’s the shops subordinant asian, or unfortunate patient
I hide to elude enforcements detainment, I’m ready to incorporate operations
I’ve been tried as an ornament & assaillant, I’m trained to reinforce its relation
I seize time & dart towards their important containments & flee before invation
I survived with drugs & cash, an enormous escapment with more abatements
Than
Phang & Chans gang shot first, some Urkrains got caught and earthed properly
Urkrains came in and rampaged on any who remain hot or cursed as a mockery
Phang got shot, lamed by pure rage from Dhrake, Phang was served, shockingly
Bullets rain Chan started stocking creeps, unloaded pain to hurt G’s methodicaly
Remember game recognizes Game, so logically Police came to disburse ironically
Still they reign today, chronically killing any witness by their perversed philosphy
Who’s stopping me
So obviousy the police came up short on their property, stolen by me chomically
Because of our poverty my whole teams ornery & mean, we’ll defeat all flawlessly
Caustiously I made it back to my countries monarchy to display my clean robbery
Somberly I rest, ready for the next test, ready to bodily harm any teams monopoly
Our policies invest in our economy with no appolgies, we believe in our prophecy
Impossibly the best as a Colony of Vets, so modesty is just a dream of sovereignty
So Wannabe’s
Like Phang, Chu Chan and Dhrake were dismembered, shamed as obscure fakes
The Black Dragon Clan surrendered their fate, when they planned with the Urkrains
Dhrake double crossed Chan, the Police doubled crossed Dhrake with a damn raid
They didn’t remember plans with Dhrake, tempered with all the mistakes Chan made
Phang was a damn snake, he double crossed me and tride to take, scram and shake
Our plans were to keep sake our commands, follow through & make 900 grand, CAKE

[Hubert Cumberdale]

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Writer 2

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All officers weapons free - That's what he said to me
Trained, though nothing could have prepared me mentally
An ecstasy of energy running through me
Future opponents, in this moment I'm loving duty
Chaos all around, tons of heat, rioters run the streets
Facing their armaments and some carry guns at least
I can finally shun my leash and find some release
Cause I'm guessing that life lessons are fun to teach
So loud, the adrenaline has heightened my senses
Frightened, defenceless, some try to hide from the menace
Others scream, wildly thrashing, incomprehensible babble
Words I can't piece together cause I've never played scrabble
My vision is clear too, despite rolling black smoke
The ashes of a destroyed neighbourhood that only had hope.

Two targets approach, mounting a car, shouting from far
Clearly with violent intent, no doubting a spar
One holds a bottle in hand, aflame, soaked in gasoline
I smell it, one of many items used to trash the scene
We approach slowly, as a unit, staying steady
As those men motion maliciously, each step weighing heavy
The one in red acts first, lobbing his Molotov cocktail
We're too slow and it drops well, flaming up a hot spell
Hit an officer, I watch as he's engulfed in flame
I know his name and am impacted with tenfold the pain
It's my partner, I've met his daughter, his father
Hoped our training together would have gotten us farther
He let out a sound, an awkward awful yelp from hell
As protective gear fails oozing into a melted shell
Knew him since I was barely born, watching flesh boil
Death oil, smokeless in the air as the stench coils
My brain shuts down, drills deleted, pure animal thoughts
Engage target, kill, find weakness in any tangible spots
I lunge through the air, knocking the assailant over
Car to ground, hard impact, could easily break his shoulder
But that doesn't matter, he shoulda tried running faster
Dumb ass bastard, they never showed me the blood would splatter
I hear officers yell "back!" But those notes are void
As I clamp jaw to jugular, instantly his throat destroyed
Our eyes meet, for me, it's a nice treat to watch his death
Knowing revenge is mine alone, I stopped his breath

Police speak "Oh god, what's with the dog acting all mental
Two killed already and he won't come back to the kennel
The scenario worsens, getting harder to fight it
And now one of our own officers is part of the riot"



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Unfortunately, this week I was forced to no show an audio topical with Moses. Even though he didn't get to solidify his legacy over someone as epic as me, Moses has still done a lot in topicals in his short time involved with them.
Originally a native of Sixshot, Moses joined LB in 2009. He quickly adapted to the LB style of battling, asserting his dominance around the site. It wasn't until 2012 that he stepped into topicals however. He entered the tournament with the usual "He knows how to write a punchline, he HAS to be dope at topicals" attitude that surrounded a lot of previous tournaments. In most cases, a lot of these dope text battlers failed. In Moses' case, it couldn't have been further from the truth. Moses managed to use his talents to make his way to the final, where unfortunately he defeated Verity/IV by no show.
The lacklustre finish might not be the greatest way to win a title, but the controversy didn't damper Moses' skills. As of late, he has began adopting the skills he gained throughout the topical tournament and has began transferring them to the audio game, where he looks to mirror his dominant reign.


Achievements
2012 Topical Champion

Notable Works
In A Flash (http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/showpost.php?p=768052&postcount=6)
Jim's Crow (http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/showpost.php?p=772918&postcount=8)
My Dad was Killed (http://www.letsbeef.com/cypher_details.php?section=tb&id=40857)

[Hubert Cumberdale]

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Valley of Fools

Buried up to your neck in necromantic connection,
a necrophiliac's wet dream, bedsheets maggot infested
shallow, sandy depression, mecha-Necropolis, roses
laid next to your necklace as the sarcophagus closes ..
comet explosions executed lizards in spaceships,
so clearly transmitted in hieroglyphic arrangements.
crypts in the basement, limestone, room-temperature morgue
Unlike anything that you've imagined ever before ;
Ink-blots of thick, dried decay cake a desolate floor
contrasting puffy white fungus clouds caressing the door
like a fresh watercolor, still too wet to absorb
crimson drips down every wall in late impressionist form.
fallen temple for corpses, where a destiny's born
praised as God-body passengers on Heavenly tours.
Adding desert to storm, plus a sense of abandonment -
Pharaoh burials with arrowheads, incenses & candlesticks ..
Ra, the negligent pacifist, succumbing to His shadowy sickness,
they built this valley in pitch darkness during random eclipses,
the birth of something dead .. a stark abstraction, but vivid
where Truth is unveiled by cloak-n-dagger magic assistants,
sewer rats in wooden traps, mouths foaming, rabid afflictions
Pearly thrones beyond a gate for those who travel the distance ..
is it Random, Grey, or Purpose ticketing Tragedy's visits?
for some, sweet relief - others, the saddest decision ;
Alas, it was written. Cumulus created notes in the clouds
as those deific souls present copied most of it down.
all they missed was lost forever .. now it may only be found
by those cancer-stricken, lynched, smothered, broken or drowned ,
the Enlightened, Karma-driven, faithful, hopeful, the proud
Belief is physically the one & only motionless sound.
Belief is but a cycle, spinning slowly around -
Illuminating the crease in Ka's emotional frown ..
words Holy as Tao, but these explanations fail to deliver,
as streams of conscious capsize every boat that sails in it's rivers -
answers to questions equal cross & nails to a sinner,
like written images for death are drops of hail in a blizzard.
The scales of a lizard, ascending walls in a diagonal groove
Once a palace, now a sacrifice to camera crews ..
embalmed in deafened screams, The End, where actuality rules,
Another tomb inside this Valley of Kings, Valley of fools.

By Black D



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Congratulations on winning the championship....not.

Here are the names that were defeated in the Semi Final of the Anonymous Topical Tournament.

Writer 9 (1st) / Writer 9 (2nd) / Writer 2 (3rd) / Writer 3 (QF) – The Law (Previously defeated Snoopy316, UhMAZING, InCizion & Zygote)
Writer 26 (1st) / Writer 6 (2nd) / Writer 7 (3rd) / Writer 4 (QF) – InCizion (Previously defeated Agonize)


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SHEEP GOD - Inception

Trojan horse final force flame out Morse code roast flows, you turkey brains
Overload domes like minds tried to be accepted
In every town, city and state but Rome/
Shown out the verses, preach in public
Iron out the rubbish when you begin to scrub it down like a battleship/
Grip pens until the air escapes the vessel
Masculine tab actual facts come off the range, aim and shoot the page/
Shame the game, act like a baby face rapper who still can’t shave
I stab the page in rage typing out bars, writing down hearts
Spitting with flames only thing that can extinguish me the vacuum of space/
Waste my time, you get wasted in a time loop via my flow becomes a paradox
To each their own, get thrown outta plane with my name never being uttered/
Soul capture your ratting bastard masterfully pulling out cha Appleseed
Read me deeply get cha very sleepy infect your brain with more methodology
Theologically screwing up your perception interception is deeper than any recollection you ever had nautically or metaphysically/
Drill knocks shining docks plot on your dreams
Reload my ammo can battle bans shadow Stans
Get lambasted faster than fakes trying to be jakes at funeral’s and wakes/
Get the shakes you freaking bacon crisp head pipe line
Iron sight rhyming too tight not to snipe out cha mind
Before that we just bumped beats and let the verse rewind/

Black Book: Your flow and vocabulary were pretty solid. The rhyming was there in a unique way too. Not the normal rhyme structure but that's not a bad thing. You didn't have much of a story or purpose in this piece, though. Seemed to just be a rant on a bunch of random shit. Like all of it was about writing and rapping but it was sort of all over the place and had a bunch of references that didn't really connect to me. Just try to make your next piece not seem as scatter brained. Have more of an organization and clear point to it.

EtH: I instantly got a very venomous style about it. I could even go as far as the flow was almost snake like, which I guarentee is a phrase I have not said before. At times, I felt you were getting a little bit carried away with the rhyming and not really keeping your mind on what you were supposed to be writing about, but it was nothing major. I'd like to see you take a bit more of a storytelling direction in the future instead of the 'in general' style like this had, as that way you will be able to improve the topical specific aspects.

HariZon aka Storyteller ft. Just Write - Substantial Matters

Through weaves of infrastructure, I've built a repertoire ,
So rest a sure to rep the core of dispositions at our nations door.
Hold the chord- strumming death is just an open chore,
Laid in depth, I paid respect with wounds of an open sore.
Living legend where bibles recite for pensions,
Heaven with hecklers, clanking through various dimensions.
A breathing section where the smoke seems to clear intentions,
Leaving mentions for acceptance a denied state of presence.
A lonely peasant tho the path I shadow S'mine to bear,
I mind to share so my past is vague to those who strive to care.
Minus pairs - which leaves us as single delegates
We can all thrive but feeding lies leaves u desperate.
Like taro myths, my palm will give you death as a settlement,
the future That i bring and hold- i keep completely separate.

"As followers of the book,
He who spoke with gods tongue- befriend the acts of lucifer.
Bleeding the ounce of memories,
Treading deaths company,
Bitter lonely and cold"

Just Write
the states relenquish their load on the meek n' the desperate
leeching off innocence till they bleed their possesions,
the screaming, the heckling, it wont lead to repentance.
you need to seek new dimensions to percieve my perspective.
break free from opression by any means neccesary,
because it's we who decides whats needed or temporary.
i'm leading the blind till this smokescreen tarries
so I don't fall prey to deciet and proceed to perish.
and if you cherish your freedom, kids study your rights,
cuz when the day arrives you'll all have to get up & fight.
see, we're the calmest at night but it's not cuz we're sleeping
we're just channeling thoughts past our process of thinking,
i hope when the sun arises, we no longer see out the eyes of heathens
but that a fire ignites inside us and give our lives new meaning.

He knew the only way of acknowledgement...

Was to pass foes of the darkest of souls,
Remissible prose that bowed an arrow thru foes.
Timeless- capsule closed reaching for a purpose is deemed,
A self act in between Hell's Kitchen where it's never said of what's seen.
A settling scheme that cleans the minds of the free,
Tending to bent iron that speaks a language death silently treats.
He knew not to weep for weakness held an abominable weight,
Classical traits that prey'd into the shadowing wait.
Practical phase that lent hands to peel the nails shallowly straight,
Unraveling displayed that bellowed a soul 6 ft. To it's fate.
Pardon the wake but this dream is spiraling to a mess,
Somebody find the hex to take without taking a breath.
Scoundrel of death, I await for my binge of acceptance,
Wrap time with a vengeance and spear god for some leverage.
A shadow that's headless no one shakes me to be separate,
So I lay uncontested no strings to model- I'm helpless.
That's the feeling I'm left with cause judgement is played,
We have the right to bare arms but with the same sex it's reckless.
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My brother knew whats right and was raised to stand firm,
So being gay led him to see my father sooner I've learned.
So today I churn and let the smoke cry wolf in his urn,
And follow suite for true love- sometimes you gotta let it burn.

[i]R.I.P Michael Swanson
The gayest man I knew but the proudest father of 3 adopted girls and loving partner since gay rights came a thing of blessing!

Miss ya Bro!

Black Book: This was a good piece. The imagery and vocabulary were nice. The flow was there too and the rhymes were on point. I don't know which one you are Harizon, but I feel Story Teller was the better than Just Write a little overall, but both did very well. I don't really have much to say here. Just good work.

EtH: This is a rare topic to see on the very hetrosexual persona based rap sites we get a lot. I remember I was blasted once on Datpiff to challenge someone to a topical where the main character was gay. Storyteller's rhyming was awesome in that repetitive RA the Rugged Man style. Just Write took a different route, and was impressive with his long syllable rhyme schemes which never broke from the topic. There isnt too much to say other than this was a dope drop that I really enjoyed reading. I hope to see more from you guys in the future.

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With Black Book

EtH
Black Book

Hello
Hello, EtH.
I read that in a robot voice, weird. Anyways, how do you think the topical section has been progressing thus far?
The topical section has been a weird thing on LB. During time of tournaments and activity, everyone and their grandmother is down to do topicals. When it's not tournament time, nobody has time for them. Right now we got stuff going on in the section and the outlook is looking good. Good activity with the tournament and people are wanting to do topicals outside of the tournament too. People are also dropping pieces in the Writer'S Block section. Hopefully this continues even when no tournaments are going on
How do you think the monthly PPV format will work out?
I think it is a great idea. Not only does it keep the section active, it also brings in people from outside LB. And if they come here, there is a chance they will like it and stay. And the more members on here, the better it is. But the actual output of the PPV's should be dope. A lot of different battles from people of all different experience levels and skill with their own different styles putting out pieces is great.
Now into the more controversial part. What the fuck is up with you losing to EXECUTE in the first round? To me that's by far the shock of the tournament thus far.
Lmao. You needed someone to participate in that and I said I'd do it. I was very busy that week so I rushed a verse out. I typed it up in literally ten minutes and never even read it back. Shout out to EXECUTE though. His verse was decent and mine was ass. Like I don't even know why I agreed to be in that because I knew I wouldn't have the time to write. But hey, no excuses. It was my mistake and it gave a guy with less experience a chance to get more experience so it is all good.
At least you posted. *Cough* Anarchist, IV, Grizz, NOBLE and others *Cough*. You're scheduled to face Agonize in the PPV, how do you think it'll go?
I think it will go fine. Again, I didn't take much time with my piece because I was just trying to get it done but I am much happier with it than that other piece for the Anonymous Topical Tournament. I think it's a solid piece, but Agonize I think is decent. I can't really remember his quality or if I have read anything of his, but I think I have and I think it was decent.
So what you're saying is that he's a cunt and he couldn't beat you if you gave him 5 dollars and a latex glove?
Nah. I am saying that maybe if the souls of Edgar Allan Poe, Shakespeare, and the 12 Disciples of Jesus who put the Bible together somehow possessed his body then maybe he could stand a chance.
I have it on good authority that Agonize said that your mother is so far, that she is unaware that there are reasonable diet plans which could help her lose weight and inevitably save her from further discomfort and health problems. Rebuttle?
I heard Agonize's mother disowned him at the age of 16 due to his dick not being big enough for her to get satisfaction out of while molesting him.
That's totally uncalled for. This is topicals man. We don't even insult each other in this genre. I'm ashamed of you.
I am currently rewriting my topical which is under the title of "The Mistress" to be about my explorations with Agonize's mother.
Well now I know why you weren't invited to my birthday party. You're just plain rude. Now, as we conclude this interview with you being nothing but a big poppyhead (oh yeah motherfucker), have you got any last words?
My last words are a simple quote from one of my favorite movies, Pulp Fiction(which I have heard Agonize only watches for the gay rape scene). "I will carry out great vengeance on them and punish them in my wrath. Then they will know that I am the LORD, when I take vengeance on them."
Thanks, poopyhead.



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Some more exclusive match ups from the upcoming PPV, taking place in the middle of the month.

SHEEP GOD Vs Note
I found SHEEP GOD posting in the writer's block equivalent on a website off the general 'scene'; WuTangCorp. When I asked him if he was interested, he was quick to sign up to Letsbeef and post in the Writer's Block section. Not being too battle tested, SHEEP will look to hit the ground running with a first win here.
Another 'import', Note comes from RapDogs, a website which has a lot of history but now has seen better days. In search of a new challenge, Note has signed up to Letsbeef and has his sights set on kicking SG to the curb and taking the podium spot for himself.

Lyrical Sting Ray Vs Objective
Lyrical Sting Ray's main platform is battling on the Facebook page Hip Hop Immortals. I went on there looking for new sign ups to the PPV, and he was quick to accept. With a lot of experience in what I'd call the 'B Leagues' of battling, LSR will have come across Letsbeef's own Xplissit, iMMortaL, Intricate Skillz and EXECUTE along his battling path and will have been somewhat influenced by our style. With topicals being a different type of battle ground, he will have to learn and adapt fast.
If Sting Ray isn't at the top of his game, he will lose, because Objective is one of the fastest improving writers out there. An active writer on Netcees, he's faced the best and faired well on every encounter. Me and him faced off during the ISTL tournament last year, and where I eased off after it, he has continued writing and perfecting his craft.

Agonize Vs Black Book
This is our biggest match up announced so far.
Black Book was majorly upset in the opening round of the Anonymous Topical Tournament, suffering a loss to EXECUTE. Since then, he managed to bounce back with an impressive win over a long time writer in Storyteller aka HariZon. With his record evened out, there is no way Black Book will take this one laying down, and will give his all to make sure he doesn't split into the shadows in a section he thinks he's helped pioneer.
Agonize on the otherhand had a very strong showing in the ATT. Although he lost in the second round to InCizion, who made it to the Semi Finals, Agonize was one of the most impressive writers of the round. Infact, the twist at the end of this week's Verse of the Week was also used by Agonize in his first round topical, so his ideas alone would merit him a place in the final.
This will be a dope as hell topical, and will not be one to miss.


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Topical Tutorial Part 2: Staying On Topic

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1. Staying On Topic
Staying on topic is key to an effective verse. It's just like in battling, your verse is always better if almost each line is an effective punch, or relates to the battle. Don't throw something random in it. There should be a reason behind keying each of your lines. If your topical is a story, then each line should build up to the conflict, climax, turning point, and resolution; just like in a normal story, book, or novel.

For example purposes, I'm going to use part of an old verse I did...and show how the lines and words inner-relate. This topical was for the WBL and the topic was: You're in an out of body experience and you're wandering around the city. You can see everything from a clear perspective without any bias or stereotypes, but no one can see you. Describe the problems you see in society.

1. Dignity holds no weight - 2. they believe the grass is greener on only their side ~ 3. as in infinity, 4. a cycle of hate - 5. broken and mended by the faults they hide...
1. This sets up the line, starting off with a statement relating to the rest of it, in this case, it's referring to dignity. "Holds no weight" is self explanatory.
2. The saying goes, "the grass is greener on the other side" but in this case that saying has been flipping to inply that people are selfish and egocentric. Again, with the lack of self-dignity, they don't care what others think, therefore they are self centered. (Seeing how this is tying together yet?)
3. and 4. These two parts tie together. Infinity is metaphoric, both as a symbol and as a meaning. The drawn symbol of infinity is a figure eight, which looks like a cycle. So, a cycle of hate is referring to the people and their hate, which is passed on generation to generation from parent to child, and it is a continuous cycle.
5. This part wraps up 3 and 4 mostly. "Broken and mended" refers again to the passing of ideas from generation to generation. Often times parents try to instill good morals and values in their children, but the children don't listen, or vice versa, the parents try to install bad morals and values and the children develop their own. This is a cycle that is sometimes broken, but ignorance "mends" it again, so it continues.

As you can see, each part of that line ties into one another, or leads to the next part. This involves smooth transitions and inner-related ideas. Always keep this in mind. If you suddenly go off topic, it not only detracts from your verse, but sometimes also from your flow, because the reader will stop and wonder why you put that in; or it sounds out of place and throws off your flow, ideas, and consistency.



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Tutorial written by shaojin594
Originaly posted on b-boys.com
Taken from ProjectRhyme.com

[Hubert Cumberdale]

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This week, I have most definently left the best till last. After a pretty long wait, V3numb has pulled through and delivered the GFX prize for the 2013 Anonymous Topical Tournament.

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dope haha was tournament spelled incorrect on purpose?

[Obey]

This was a good read, keep up the work........asshole :D

[Hubert Cumberdale]

Punk, yes, are you a cunt on purpose :( :D

[The Law]

Eth is the fuckin man.

[Hubert Cumberdale]

Dirty Work InCizion Dissizit @Enfinite EXECUTE HVK UhMAZING Black Book Agonize GRizzEAT IV Noble Anarchist Eye G Fidel Z Dysfunctional Ill Reem Explizzitt Phenomonon ProspektJS Punk SideEight Snoopy316 HaRizon Streetz Da Hood

[NOBLE]

This was very nice EtH! You put a lot of work into this and it shows! This tournament has been dope so far and I look forward to the final.

[Aggo]

I showed my mother this thread. She was less offended than I had hoped.

[Hubert Cumberdale]

I showed your mother my threads...:S

[Execute]

I showed myself this thread. #forever alone

btw Lyrical Sting Rays's real name is Anthony Ray,so just ask him about which one he'd prefer.

EtH

[InCizion]

Nice work. EtH..... always putting in work.... and it shows!

[127839764]

I showed your mother my threads...:S

ROLF