TOPICAL TOURNAMENT RD 2: Straight Edge (Loser) vs exZACHly (Winner) 3-0KO

[Ill Phenom]

TOPICAL TOURNAMENT 2011 ROUND 2

Straight Edge (http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/member.php?u=883223) Vs exZACHly (http://www.letsbeef.com/forums/member.php?u=879457)

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE WEDNESDAY (09-28-11) AT 11:59PM EST. VERSES ARE DUE SATURDAY (10-01-11) AT 11:59PM. EST. NO EXCEPTIONS.

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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

[Capitalist]

Check is in.

[exZACHly]

Check Please

[Capitalist]

Mans Voices In The Wind

The days and the time goes by, the Hours Too
Voices on the battle field bloom, like Flowers Do
Maximum intelligence as he guides me through the Days
Helps me hesitate and think twice so I can choose my Ways
Minorly sized, yet strong, though once I coward in Fear
Voices glistened through the winds, as he whispered in my Ear
Confidence to stand, confidence to go for the Fight
Looked down upon by the voices, as I slept through the Night
Gave me the fearless motion, never again said I'm Scared
We fought my enemies together, the monsters in my Nightmares
I was given gifts to do what I want, and silence The Crowd
Leave the haters in shock, silenced, not hearing A Sound
I thank the voices that guide me through my Troubles
They left for a bit and all the issues Doubled
He thought to leave me on my own for a little Instead
Though I had no support, thought of as crazy, never had any Friends
So I tried to handle my struggles, tried hard to pull Through
Left begging for the voices back, what I really need is You
He came back to help me, slowly I grew Strong
He claims now I know what is right and whats Wrong
The voices only came back just for a little Bit
Claims all I needed was a few of his Tips
So I took his wisdom and knowledge, and got back on my Feet
Now i'm as confident as ever, and can survive in the Streets

[exZACHly]

"The Picture Changed my Life"

The wind blows...Pieces carry than Fall, due to The gravity
The once made up Picture, is all of sudden a Reality
Parts of something that was only Art, are now somehow Scattering
Blowing away Quicker, becoming a field full of Planted Seeds
Only seconds it takes to Spread Though, the blooming takes several Hours
The result is becoming a Meadow, decorated with Yellow Flowers
One breath for this Creation, can you Imagine the Power?
It's like me breathing what i thought was Air, was somehow Magical Powder
Am i the only one witnessing this Greatness? Something others Never will See
Until the Finished product is There, My story is better than Ever can Be
Feels like the type of thing that occurs Once And, will never Happen Again
But it was fun while it lasted all of a Sudden, it comes to a Tragical End
Nothing else describes the Feeling, Words are Only a Start
It's like Spiritual Healing, these events have Shown me a Part
Of something that i thought was Impossible, life seemed Empty and Dark
I lost my love but it was Logical, that this just Mended my Heart
Order is Restored, in a life that was Lacking an Upside
Confidence was lost Before, but it changed into Having enough Pride
To get Through the Day, effortlessly a sigh somehow found a way to Bring Love
The picture just Blew Away, and created something i once only Dreamed Of

[exZACHly]

Super keyed....It sucks, but anything is better than no show :)

[ozark]

Rhyme scheme/flow- tbh i feel both flowed pretty well with a good rhyme scheme so TIE-
Vocabulary- exzachly got this cata- nothing really stood out as strong vocab imo- but SE verse really didnt need exstensive vocab because of the story-
Topic meaning- i feel EX took this cata- i connected better with his concept and angle of the pic-
story telling progression- S-E got this cata- i liked his story telling ability here while keeping the rhyne scheme.
Emotion- EX got this cata- his verse was deep and i connected well with it-
Imagery- S-E takes this cata due to his good storytelling- EX had good imagery as well-
Poetic technique- EX takes this cata with allthe emotion used- although SE had good ideas as well-
Ending- EX took this cata- i really liked his ending- very deep and just closed his piece very nicely-

Mvgt EX, good drops by both here- but i felt he had a stronger topical meaning with lots of emotion!!!

[Capitalist]

Thanks Zach, now if you win i'll look real bad :(

[Dizz Da Dogg]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie
Vocabulary - Ex
Topic/Meaning - Ex
Storytelling/Progression - Tie
Emotion - Straight
Imagery - Ex
Poetic Techniques - Straight
Ending - Ex

Ex takes it, great dropa from both.

[Ill Phenom]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow - Tie - Both were about even in this cat. Neither was really flawed or shined more than the others.
Vocabulary - Ex - Slighty. He picked the right spots to use certain words with this. Edge started good with this cat and it slowly got simpler towards the end.
Topic/Meaning - Edge - Felt He brought a better idea and concept to the table for this picture, although he could have portrayed it a little better. Ex sorta just went with what the picture was showing.
Storytelling/Progression - Tie - Both did decent in this category.
Emotion - Ex - Felt like his emotion connected with this picture a bit better.
Imagery - Ex - His imagery fit the picture a bit better
Poetic Techniques - Edge - Because of the concept he brought to the table for the picture
Ending - Tie - Both ended their verse pretty decent.

Ex GVT

and wins 3-0 KO

[Hubert Cumberdale]

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[RULE]

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