Scheme: LACKIN' THE MOTIVATION Please have your verse in by Sunday March 20th before 11:59 pm EST. Anyone who hasn’t posted by the deadline will be DQ’d. Good luck and make it a dope one. Posted on: 2016-03-18 14:30:39

Voting will end in 48 Hours! Posted on: 2016-03-21 12:15:28

Rican, verse was really choppy, broken multis, six syllables and at some points you didn't rhyme properly. I felt that you had the ideas and concepts down as you managed to pack a concept in every line which imo reduced the amount of filler, even in the setups and the buildups. I felt that the wording was a bit iffy, like in the tracking locations line. I felt that you could have added a bit more creativity in the "techs know where he at" build up. Other than that, i felt that you had simple comparisons most of the time, like the box something/illness/va ccination and the amputation lines were very basic and predictable. I like the basket case line and thought it was your best bar. Bleu, your scheme was fluent throughout and i liked some of your concepts like the dope exchanges line and the crapping in basins line. I felt that the art line was good too. I also felt that the DC/Jones line didn't hit hard as i thought you could have been more creative in the build up rather than just adding the "match with the Goat" bit because the current build up to the punch made the comparison a bit basic. Though i understand why you'd do that because "match with the Goat" is a part of the scheme. Other than that, i felt that your wording was decent, felt you could be more creative in places like the slapping some sense in the bitch line and the closer. My winner was more consistent and had a better scheme work as compared to his opponent. The loser had some good ideas, the scheme work was meh and it clearly projected that he was lacking the motivation to write this verse. Fair is in. Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-21 21:01:03

Okay, so one didn't fill the box, had broken multies, and has punches weren't inferior. I don't think a long expo is needed here, and others have already said anything else I could mention... Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-21 21:09:30

One was kinda mismatching the syllables and that kinda mess up the flow at times which in turn kinda mess up the punch strength in a lot of your lines...The other came with nice wording and the flow was very smooth for the most part mixed in with clever lines...I felt one clearly took this thought this would be much closer.The fairs in got one. Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-21 21:10:28

Clear winner. One kept the scheme better and had a mixture of mild and good punches, while the other one slowly broke off the scheme and started doing a 6 syllable multi-run instead of a 7. Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-21 22:02:26

clear winner here.. everything has been said already fairs in Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-22 01:13:42

Been said already. One was a lot cleaner and on point in all areas while his opponent was not at his best. Multis were not great tho had some ok punches and concepts he was simply outclasses overall by someone who kept to the scheme a lot more coherently. Voted: Yes (Hidden)
Posted on: 2016-03-22 12:14:18