Round 1: -Speechless- Vs Deep|Prose (Deep|Prose Wins Via 3-0 KO)

-Speechless- Vs Deep|Prose
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE SUNDAY (09-18-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE THURSDAY (09-22-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

Line Length: 20-40 lines.



Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

-Speechless- Vs Deep|Prose
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

House Rules Apply. Any questions, contact me.

CHECK INS ARE DUE SUNDAY (09-18-11) AT 11:59PM PST. VERSES ARE DUE THURSDAY (09-22-11) AT 11:59PM. NO EXCEPTIONS.
(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

Line Length: 20-40 lines.



Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

Soo i have to send 32??

Soo i have to send 32??

No, you post your verse in this thread. Forget the battle box.

Lines work like, for example, this is line one,
And then this one here is line two, simple shit.

The verses go in this thread.

No, you post your verse in this thread. Forget the battle box.

Lines work like, for example, this is line one,
And then this one here is line two, simple shit.

The verses go in this thread.

[Prose_]

"checking in" i suppose.

[Prose_]

"checking in" i suppose.

[Prose_]

i wake up in a hospital bed... shiverin cold in a panic...
physical and emotional damage wit the grim reaper holdin my hand n'
saying "your time is near"... i blinked my eyes and homie just vanished!
doctors rushed in the room wit the blankest fuzziest faces
screamin "the patient has fully awaken! take him to the surgery room and prepare for procedure!"
before i knew it they knocked me out with anesthesia!...

woke up a second time... strapped to a white surgical chair...
looked at one of the nurses... beneath her mask... under the surface just there...
was my ex girlfriend! saw the other two doctors...
one was my dead brother! the other my abusive father!
glanced around the room it was dimly lit and full of machines...
one was a heart monitor wit my weak pulse on the screen...
my ex girl made an incision in my chest... made a painful slit then
ripped out my heart and started replacin it wit
one that had veins up in it that pumped hatred up em especially made for women!

then my dead brother who was iced in a drive by
shot an optical lazer up in my eyes
that darkened my view of the world... but made me see the injustice and crime...

my abusive father pumped more anesthesia that paralyzed me and had me in a trance see?
couldnt feel my sense of manhood or my hands and feet...
health class isnt the way to learn the birds and the bees...
well... the way he tried to show me how to be a man wasnt workin at least...
he taught me how to act like a man wit the most worst example by far
when he had my mom gripped agains the wall, chokin her hard...
when he did that... he took a scapel... cut a wound up open and large...
then tried to surgically stitch it back up... left an emotional scar...

closed my eyes... my body was cut up and battered highly...
all i could hear was the sound of the heart monitor whining.....

the sound of me flatlining.........

beeeeeeeeeeeeeeep....

[Prose_]

i wake up in a hospital bed... shiverin cold in a panic...
physical and emotional damage wit the grim reaper holdin my hand n'
saying "your time is near"... i blinked my eyes and homie just vanished!
doctors rushed in the room wit the blankest fuzziest faces
screamin "the patient has fully awaken! take him to the surgery room and prepare for procedure!"
before i knew it they knocked me out with anesthesia!...

woke up a second time... strapped to a white surgical chair...
looked at one of the nurses... beneath her mask... under the surface just there...
was my ex girlfriend! saw the other two doctors...
one was my dead brother! the other my abusive father!
glanced around the room it was dimly lit and full of machines...
one was a heart monitor wit my weak pulse on the screen...
my ex girl made an incision in my chest... made a painful slit then
ripped out my heart and started replacin it wit
one that had veins up in it that pumped hatred up em especially made for women!

then my dead brother who was iced in a drive by
shot an optical lazer up in my eyes
that darkened my view of the world... but made me see the injustice and crime...

my abusive father pumped more anesthesia that paralyzed me and had me in a trance see?
couldnt feel my sense of manhood or my hands and feet...
health class isnt the way to learn the birds and the bees...
well... the way he tried to show me how to be a man wasnt workin at least...
he taught me how to act like a man wit the most worst example by far
when he had my mom gripped agains the wall, chokin her hard...
when he did that... he took a scapel... cut a wound up open and large...
then tried to surgically stitch it back up... left an emotional scar...

closed my eyes... my body was cut up and battered highly...
all i could hear was the sound of the heart monitor whining.....

the sound of me flatlining.........

beeeeeeeeeeeeeeep....

Ill ROAST THIS CAT an his DOPEST RAPS,
Hit em with heavy bars till all his fuckin BONES COLLAPSE!
Ill leave this chump rocked like CHUCK LIDDEL
when i go on a `rampage` with punches until my KNUCKLES SWELL.
Deeps raps Be BORING ME, soo. he about to get TORN HARD,
I bet he takes more cock more ORALLY, than a PORN STAR.
If he said he packed gats.. I'd Dare em to TRY SOMETHING,
i know this BUYS BLUFFING cause his `fuckin fake` .... Like DRY HUMPING.
An everyone knows DEEP PROSE , DEEP THROATS ,
Italian Sausages an full pans of MEAT LOAF.
Even if he had `cracked teeth` he couldn't SPEAK DOPE,
An if he said he was, i'd leave this WEED SMOKED.
In This battle he'll CERTAINLY DIE, cause his whack.
Shiiet. Dr Suese is doper them Him with his NURSERY RHYMES.
He Got `Garbage Rhymes` So Everything He WRIT IS A WASTE,Consider This Rap Battle `Metal Songs Drumming` they Way I Hit Em Hard Like Snares, An Give Him "Heel-KICKS" TO THE FACE.
That Leave Em With A FRACTURED JAW,Then Ill CRACK HIS ARMS,
STAB HIS PALMS,Slice his BACK HIS SAWS with thinkin his RAP IS RAW.
If he thinks hes better, in his mind his FAX IS WRONGS.
cause he still couldn't be `doped up` hittin CRACK IN BONGS.
Ill take a SWITCH BLADE an puncture his lung when i rip his RIB CAGE,
an when it comes to battlin' his a`female dog with rap` all his lyrics are BITCH MADE!.
He got light tactics. an i got heavy TECHS/text TO BLAST.
hes raps disgust me, like straight SEX TO FAGS(nohomo).
Like COCAINE in the mouth, when hes punches hit me i feel NO PAIN.
-click this link Prose ` "i bet u think this song is about you" `because your SO FAIN (lol)
battling you is like a fighting a baby, your NOTHING TO ME,
an if u never controlled a mic you aint a FUCKING EMCEE
Soo just step the FUCK BACK an quit being a `faggot ass fiend`
puffin the BUT CRACK.
an thinkin ur harder then a kick to the NUT SUCK!cause ur not
if ur getting choped up like weed an blazed in a BLUNT WRAP.
i aint sayin your DOPE KID, cause u aint nowheres close to POTENT,
ur flows shit like a sewage line an mines got the MOTION of OCEANS.

Ill ROAST THIS CAT an his DOPEST RAPS,
Hit em with heavy bars till all his fuckin BONES COLLAPSE!
Ill leave this chump rocked like CHUCK LIDDEL
when i go on a `rampage` with punches until my KNUCKLES SWELL.
Deeps raps Be BORING ME, soo. he about to get TORN HARD,
I bet he takes more cock more ORALLY, than a PORN STAR.
If he said he packed gats.. I'd Dare em to TRY SOMETHING,
i know this BUYS BLUFFING cause his `fuckin fake` .... Like DRY HUMPING.
An everyone knows DEEP PROSE , DEEP THROATS ,
Italian Sausages an full pans of MEAT LOAF.
Even if he had `cracked teeth` he couldn't SPEAK DOPE,
An if he said he was, i'd leave this WEED SMOKED.
In This battle he'll CERTAINLY DIE, cause his whack.
Shiiet. Dr Suese is doper them Him with his NURSERY RHYMES.
He Got `Garbage Rhymes` So Everything He WRIT IS A WASTE,Consider This Rap Battle `Metal Songs Drumming` they Way I Hit Em Hard Like Snares, An Give Him "Heel-KICKS" TO THE FACE.
That Leave Em With A FRACTURED JAW,Then Ill CRACK HIS ARMS,
STAB HIS PALMS,Slice his BACK HIS SAWS with thinkin his RAP IS RAW.
If he thinks hes better, in his mind his FAX IS WRONGS.
cause he still couldn't be `doped up` hittin CRACK IN BONGS.
Ill take a SWITCH BLADE an puncture his lung when i rip his RIB CAGE,
an when it comes to battlin' his a`female dog with rap` all his lyrics are BITCH MADE!.
He got light tactics. an i got heavy TECHS/text TO BLAST.
hes raps disgust me, like straight SEX TO FAGS(nohomo).
Like COCAINE in the mouth, when hes punches hit me i feel NO PAIN.
-click this link Prose ` "i bet u think this song is about you" `because your SO FAIN (lol)
battling you is like a fighting a baby, your NOTHING TO ME,
an if u never controlled a mic you aint a FUCKING EMCEE
Soo just step the FUCK BACK an quit being a `faggot ass fiend`
puffin the BUT CRACK.
an thinkin ur harder then a kick to the NUT SUCK!cause ur not
if ur getting choped up like weed an blazed in a BLUNT WRAP.
i aint sayin your DOPE KID, cause u aint nowheres close to POTENT,
ur flows shit like a sewage line an mines got the MOTION of OCEANS.

[IV]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary- Prose, good shit
Topic/Meaning- Prose, really enjoyed your meaning. Speech didn't stick to the topic
Storytelling/Progression- prose, clear beginning and ending, progressed nicely
Emotion- prose, easily. really thought out, your verse was real
Imagery- about the same level, but Prose because of the depth
Poetic Techniques- Speech had nice flow, but in a battle sense.. Prose verse didn't always rhyme, gunna have to give that to speech, but for the wrong reasons
Ending- prose, cliche ending with the beep, but the lead up to that was nice

Overall- Prose i really enjoyed reading your verse, it was nicely thought out with a lot of emotion and it fitted with the topic. Speechless i think you got the wrong idea with this round. But prose nice work keep it up

Vote- Deep Prose

[IV]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary- Prose, good shit
Topic/Meaning- Prose, really enjoyed your meaning. Speech didn't stick to the topic
Storytelling/Progression- prose, clear beginning and ending, progressed nicely
Emotion- prose, easily. really thought out, your verse was real
Imagery- about the same level, but Prose because of the depth
Poetic Techniques- Speech had nice flow, but in a battle sense.. Prose verse didn't always rhyme, gunna have to give that to speech, but for the wrong reasons
Ending- prose, cliche ending with the beep, but the lead up to that was nice

Overall- Prose i really enjoyed reading your verse, it was nicely thought out with a lot of emotion and it fitted with the topic. Speechless i think you got the wrong idea with this round. But prose nice work keep it up

Vote- Deep Prose

[Eye G]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow : Speechless
Vocabulary : Speechless
Topic/Meaning : Deep|prose
Storytelling/Progression : Deep|Prose
Emotion : Deep|prose / Speechless
Imagery : Deep|Prose
Poetic Techniques : Were N/a
Ending : Both were good

.....:::V0T3:::....Goes to Deep|pros because he was on the topic ....Speechless had dissing verse so i had the meal and paid the bill for that...lol no h8....glooks....g luck to both but ma vote goes to Deep|pros

[Eye G]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow : Speechless
Vocabulary : Speechless
Topic/Meaning : Deep|prose
Storytelling/Progression : Deep|Prose
Emotion : Deep|prose / Speechless
Imagery : Deep|Prose
Poetic Techniques : Were N/a
Ending : Both were good

.....:::V0T3:::....Goes to Deep|pros because he was on the topic ....Speechless had dissing verse so i had the meal and paid the bill for that...lol no h8....glooks....g luck to both but ma vote goes to Deep|pros

[ozark]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- hands down deep prose, flowed very well and he grasp'd the concept nicely,
Vocabulary- prose, nice use of words
Topic/Meaning- prose def stuck to the topic
Storytelling/Progression- prose had a nice beginning and end- great read
Emotion- both had emotion but prose stuck to the topic
Imagery- prose once again, painted a picture vividly-

Mvgt deep prose- great read from both but prose kept the concept of the topical very nicely-
Poetic Techniques
Ending

[ozark]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- hands down deep prose, flowed very well and he grasp'd the concept nicely,
Vocabulary- prose, nice use of words
Topic/Meaning- prose def stuck to the topic
Storytelling/Progression- prose had a nice beginning and end- great read
Emotion- both had emotion but prose stuck to the topic
Imagery- prose once again, painted a picture vividly-

Mvgt deep prose- great read from both but prose kept the concept of the topical very nicely-
Poetic Techniques
Ending

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