All right, first of all... Your mic is awful. Lol. Like, it's so bad it makes a LOT of what you're saying really mumbled, and kind of lost in the back ground noise. There were a few parts when your flow became a little broken, and it seemed like you had some trouble transitioning into a beat format. Your delivery is REALLY bland, and lacks a lot of emotion. Which isn't helped by your sort of melancholy tone, and the mic issues I already talked about. Something that might help this, is memorizing your verse prior to rapping it, so you aren't so distracted by reading, and can add more thought to how you're saying what you wrote.

All right, first of all... Your mic is awful. Lol. Like, it's so bad it makes a LOT of what you're saying really mumbled, and kind of lost in the back ground noise. There were a few parts when your flow became a little broken, and it seemed like you had some trouble transitioning into a beat format. Your delivery is REALLY bland, and lacks a lot of emotion. Which isn't helped by your sort of melancholy tone, and the mic issues I already talked about. Something that might help this, is memorizing your verse prior to rapping it, so you aren't so distracted by reading, and can add more thought to how you're saying what you wrote.