I think Student's piece had more of a direction, more of a story with a conclusion in the end. Los's piece was more like a moment's introspection along with some reminiscing. Los had better flow, use of multies, etc. Los's piece tied into the image more directly as he described what was in the picture whereas Student's piece tied into the image more metaphorically as he describe an almost post-apocalyptic world after technology. I normally prefer the more direct approach so I'd have to give Los the edge in the category of image-relatedness. I felt Student had slightly better vocab. Both could have done better with imagery. I felt that emotion was slightly better conveyed in Student's piece. Student also had a better ending which kinda leaves the reader intrigued while trying to figure out what he saw which makes him die on the spot. Overall, this was really close and both had certain categories they did better in, but I felt one did slightly better overall. Vote goes to Student.
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