This was a dope read here. Had to go through each verse a couple times.
Writer 1
I felt you did a good job of portraying the story. It was a smooth read and you stuck to the topic (as you should) very well. I liked your connection in the end. Nice vocab as well. I just felt it could of been a bit smoother w/ the multis. Overall I though this was a nice topical and the story telling ability was very nice
Writer 2
I'm going to sound like a broken record here but I felt you did an excellent job of portraying the story here. I was also just a bit more hooked on the story here. The multis made the entire verse very smooth. Also nice use of vocab. The connection at the end was very nice too.
Overall- Neither had flaws from what I could see in there verse. Both had an amazing verse here. This ends up being about personal preference and I thought one was smoother and drew me into their story just a bit more than the other.
MVGT- Writer 2
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