Writer 8 - It was a really unusual idea that was quite hard to get into the mind, maybe coz W8 was out of his when he wrote it? It was real difficult to detect a flow to it and the rhymes - when they were there - were pretty simplistic. Topicals don't need to keep to a structure as tightly as battles - true - but if it's got like 1/5 of a flow, that's worse than being completely lacking in flow, coz it kind of leads you on at points then knocks you back.
Writer 9 - This one was more coherent and although the plot was crazy predictable (especially to those who know Immortal Technique's Dance with the Devil...) it had much more about it. The language used was simple, but was much clearer than the other guy, although there were fair few off rhymes. Good vocabulary though - I'm a brother to any man who uses the word quibble.
8 and 9 both had some of the same flaws, but one of them was structurally stronger and contained a better concept, even if it is one which is fairly well known as a Textbook Technique story.
I vote for Writer 9.
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