Rhyming Scheme/Flow: Mikey, Ill had multis for days but it knocked the flow a tad. Mikey was a smooth reading all the way through.
Vocabulary: Phenom, felt his vivid descriptions encapsulated his story better and inevitably gave it more "Ummf"
Topic/Meaning: Phenom, easily IMO. Mikey had a niice read no doubt. But, it lacked that poetic feel to it. Where phenom had that covered basically the whole time
Storytelling/Progression: This was close, Phenom. By a hair i give it to illy, because i dont know about yins but i really enjoyed mikeys piece. but felt phenoms had more depth which lead to a more pleasureable read.
Emotion: Phenom. felt it was just rawer and more powerful in all emotional aspects. mikey had a running to win this catagory but showed up a little short in my eyes. Reading it seems Ill spent a tad more time perfecting it.
Imagery: Phenom, he painted a vivid picture line after line. Mikey had the story going, but lacked that poetic luster.
Poetic Techniques: Phenom, as i said in my last explanation. To me Mikey lacked that poetic lust that drives these topicals. His story to me was more comedic than deep. Flowed preicsly but didn't habe the content to take this catagory.
Ending: Phenom, his had a deep underlying meaning which is unveiled to the reader at the end. Where mikey had a dope ending but it seemed more trackish then topicalish to me. Good reads on both sides fellows but....
MVGT: Ill Phenom
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