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Hmmm.. How EASY it would be to just say "Nice drop!" and walk away like everybody else... But nahh.. I'ma be honest with you, cuz that's what real cats do, right? .. With that said... The rhyming wasn't felt. The concept, on the other hand, was played out beautifully. If this was a "poem" per say, and not a "cypher," I would probably give you a 9/10. But since nothing was clarified, I can only rate it as a cypher, in which case almost every rhyme was completely forced and/or didn't even exist to begin with. Unbreakable doesn't rhyme with Untouchable. Washington doesn't rhyme with Cotton, or anything else you may have capitalized for whatever reason. Sparkle doesn't rhyme with Buckle. Sunshine doesn't rhyme with Valentine (okay, maybe 1 weak syllable.. that's not a rhyme though, lets be honest). Hearts... well yeah... obviously it rhymes with Hearts.. it's the same word. Forever & Together? I can't give rhyming credit for a saying that's on every Halmark greeting card. Off & Off? No, sorry man, we can't be impressed by rhyming a 3 letter word with... ITSELF.. Like I said, if you were trying to pass this off as a poem, or spoken word, or something... MAYBE... But as a cypher, this won't fly. I'm gonna be nice and rate it a 6 because the writing and imagery was actually good... You just forgot to make it flow. Your LYRICS have massive potential, but you really need to work on rhyme-scheme before drops like this will ever see the top half of the chart. Always honest & respectful. - P.C
Rated: 6
Posted on: 2013-06-03 06:14:57 
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