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Good shit fam.
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-10-25 03:10:55 
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Actually read it...
Posted on: 2012-10-25 03:11:54 
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nice lyrics
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-10-25 03:55:49 
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I See You Man; That Growing Up Story
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-10-25 14:30:11 
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Good shit holmes. vivid detail.
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2012-10-25 15:00:56 
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Amazing bro, that was some real shit. Keep at it your definitely growing as a writer.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-25 16:08:36 
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Dont usually read text cyphers and battles but this one was worth it.. deep man.. thats always the way to go with music... from the heart...
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-25 17:08:38 
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Yo g'looks Pugz, def. appreciated. I appreciate all feed.
Posted on: 2012-10-25 20:43:58 
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WOW! This really is your best work I was rapping it in my head which I was reading it and it went amazingly together rhymes were nice and I love the meaning in this too alot of real talk here....a well deserved 10
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-25 20:46:57 
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dope shit. good story.
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2012-10-25 20:57:22 
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Yo I wasn't even tryna have a story behind it, really that shit just happens as I write.
Posted on: 2012-10-25 21:00:16 
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true shit all of it ,very nice cyph , 9 for content -1 coz its a bit depressing though lol i like a cyph that shows hope or adversity or with a twist , not just a rant about how crap life is for EVERYONE , good writing though , keep it up :D
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2012-10-26 14:56:12 
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damn nice cypher fam kept it real
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-26 14:59:28 
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Another good one from you.. This was pretty good.. I think im gonna just stop commenting on your cyphers and just drop the rate..
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-26 15:00:58 
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there ya go
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-26 16:59:38 
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10
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-27 13:57:20 
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This ones dimed all the way, deep as a long time bruh
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-27 14:13:07 
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great cypher fam , a lil dark but it works well, very impressed dimed
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-27 14:53:32 
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This was deep. A few places that seemed a bit rushed or didn't really fit in with the rest of it, but overall it was nice, good wording and nice meaning, executed well and really got your feelings across. Well done.
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-10-27 15:38:36 
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U killin it Verbs u Should Go battle aye Verb lol im kiddin
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-10-28 22:38:47 
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nice drop homie, deep and heart felt, this one hit home!!!!! I can relate to a lot of what was said here, structure and multies were a lil meh here and there, but def worth the read. I enjoyed it fam
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-10-28 23:09:43 
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Enjoyed this read, dime.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-11-03 05:47:35 
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This was def dope you need to get on a mic dope multies and the realness about life was dope 10
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-11-03 20:29:52 
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Good Shit
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-11-04 16:31:57 
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fking dope. deep, good content, flowed well...easy 10/10 and if there was an 11/10 i'd give it that haha - no exaggeration.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-11-05 16:39:42 
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ive watched you elevate yo, i feel proud, you are a monster with this shit now homie,flow was crazyyy
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-11-06 16:17:01 
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good shit fam
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2012-11-23 01:45:45 
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dang man this is some pretty original type shit. i'd say that it's not a dime as far as some of the fundamentals go, but ima dime it anyway based on the feeling i get from it. oh and just a minor side note: when you said "Okay this is the last bar I've got for you. lol " i thought to myself that shit shouldnt be in there hehe.. not a big deal just figured i'd mention it. anyway, first dime i gave in a minute, keep it coming
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-11 23:50:28 
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''got me writing more than Pac!" That's an awful lot of writing, cause that dude wrote several songs when he went to the BATHROOM lol. I know you didn't mean it literally probably (or maybe you did which would be impressive) but regardless it was just to put emphasis on a point but it just kind of caught my attention lol.
so used to 'defeat' it's like you've been 'rasied in a shoe' -- dope line man. i like your meta's and wordplay you sneak in there sometimes.
Overal l a very good lyrical piece, but more than that, the overall message of this. Starting out talking about your sad family life and whatnot, the struggles with your brother passing/dad leaving/mom crying, yet you STAY STRONG and keep keeping on.
I tried doing something similar to this believe it or not fam, (i was on so many fucking pills) and my negative emotions got the best of me and I kept on talking about the bad times (i had more bad times than most ppl) and I couldn't even finish. I went into literally SICK details.. blah.. It's something I'm going to finish and put on here one day.
Point is you finished all the way through with a great message, you did what I couldn't quite put into words. But I feel like the most negative part of my journey is OVER, NOW, but when I tried to write, it was in the middle of it all really lol, so yeah.. in conclusion, great job from me bro. Respect from me fam.
And I noticed, a lot of these words/rhyme schemes you used would flow real well and actually sound good on audio...
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-13 12:08:14 
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put this shiii down yo
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-14 02:58:15 
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Dimed.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-15 04:48:32 
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As always... RECORD THIS SHIT YO! lol. You already know.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-15 11:19:21 
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This was a good piece. I liked it overall. It flowed pretty well and the multies were pretty tight. It was sort of scatter brained though. Like it'd just jump around. You could have transitioned between ideas better. But overall this was still solid.
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2012-12-16 16:29:46 
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I'm impressed, Only problem I have with this is I've read cyphers about this sort of topic too many times. With that said this is one of the better ones that revolve around the topic. I'm diming this, try get it hotlisted.....
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2012-12-25 21:31:16 
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this was some super real shit that hit home.... very niice mad. Impressed, stoytelling was excellent here// and this would be mad niice recorded fam
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-08 02:14:06 
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good lyrics nicely drop
Rated: 8 Posted on: 2013-01-08 17:57:23 
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not bad son. dig it. especially the last bit. like RULE said tho. you should hop on that mic son.
Posted on: 2013-01-08 19:42:56 
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You got a knack for cyphers, kid. Good read fam
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2013-01-08 20:14:31 
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nice cypher i dont really read text cyphers but this one flowed together nicely. cosign rule though......you need ta RECORD this shit
Rated: 9 Posted on: 2013-01-14 13:15:31 
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Tight shit...deep shit..
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-17 18:45:17 
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Yo man, I ain't going to lie. I can relate to this a lot man. I really love the emotion and expression you let out on this. If there was a higher rate than 10. I'd go higher. But man, This is track material straight up. #Classick
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-17 19:04:13 
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yo for real. dimed. real shit, came straight from your heart evidently. dope shit with a couple wordplay factors in there too. props fam, you killin it.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-18 15:09:04 
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Now this is the shit I'm talking about. Lots of details, specifics, ect. Only thing that tripped me up was the word 'start' twice up near the top. Felt like it slowed down a bit in the middle but the start and end.....whew. Good shit my man.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-23 20:03:43 
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Some dope shit my dude...real nice flow to it and I'm like tha rest of tha people on here..ya need to drop this shit wit a mic.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-01-24 00:16:30 
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WOW THATS DEEP AND REAL SON.....I LIKE REAL ISSUES AND READING INSIGHTS INTO PPL's LIVES AND FEELINGS THEY EXPRESS IN THA WRITTEN WORD.....LIKED THA 'USED TO DEFEAT RAISED BY A SHOE' PART THAT WOZ NICE, WOZ NICE TO SEE YOU ADDIN A FEW QUIRKS LIKE THAT INTO AN EMOTIONAL SCRIPT AS IT REALLY UMPHs THA VERSE.....GOOD SHIT MAYNE IMMA RATE YOU A 10.
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-02-02 17:17:20 
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woooorrrrrrrrrdddd.. i rapped this shit out loud sounds good fam... you should just spit this shit accapella and throw it on the tube or something bruh... shits dope though 10. you've inspired me to write something lol --- back to my original comment lol..
Rated: 10 Posted on: 2013-02-11 02:32:40 
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