bones-seen better from u fam.. a couple awkward sentences that didnt read well at all. ex. squid with a dry awkward plead?what the hell is that sopposed to mean?and how exactly is that a simile to 'square boxing'? how do they even relate at all?so when your doin text in a box, u feel like a squid beggin to be put back in the water? the other instance is trumpin hope ,how does this relate to black pro nation?so the pro nation beats hope or overpowers it?this is prolly the most sloppy i seen u drop, as far as wording and concepts... Lizma n- sentences are really hard to follow in a normal sense.. its like u have alot of good ideas ,then fuck them all up with fractured or random thoughts.. no cohesion, just ideas and concepts.. ex. ur first line u questioning the metal..ok so your askin yourself if u want to use a gun?so then how does a can evolve?the gun doesnt change its shape to adapt to its environment, then u talk about his switch is the butterfly like metamorphed children?wtf is that?u makin up adjectives as u go along..?next bar was somewhat better with the camelot references, but still hard follow due to the fractured sentences.. prolly your best line of the battle was the cat a log filling.. this was tough, but one came a tad more creative conceptually as well as flowwise.. one was a bit easier to follow but horrendous wording hurt the effort.. fairs in Voted: BonesRecordz / Lizman
Posted on: 2016-04-06 23:34:06

One was a tad better than the other Voted: BonesRecordz / Lizman
Posted on: 2016-04-15 12:51:49