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Posted on: 2013-10-13 03:27:22

MAD-ok setup relavency was a mixed bag here, opening bar, the 'timeout from the game' , connected a bit wit 'goalies on the field.. but then you fell off wit irrelavent filler,how does brewin up poor scripts relate at all to 'spit fresh or ORBIT gum?same wit the next bar.. setup doesnt buildup at all to 'bums on the street, nor sleepin on pavements.. try to get back into keepin shit relavent.. as far as multi placement, pretty decent, not overly wordy, and to the point, towards the punches.. my fav was probably GOALIES ON FIELD.. the worst was 'teeth rot' which was a concept that seemed to come out of nowhere.. PRODUCT-o pening started wit a very played wordpun.. URINATE..you somehow got a slight angle to it...but it ended weak... second bar, setup was somewhat relavent, wit rising teacher / and teaching basic rhymin features.. wordplay was again another overly used one, undyin feature, seems like a 'filler' to complete your multi scheme.. id try to stay away from those, i wouldve rewrote it as, im l.b.'s RISING TEACHER , wit LINES TO GREET YA, as a 'pro to call' to help ya wit RHYMIN FEATURES./ probably ya best concept was the urinate, the bars were written the cleanest, related from setup to punch.. the rest requires a bit of tuning wit better wording... anyway, my winner here edged this wit a more consistently cleaner read.. which helped him get past his slightly basic punches.. fairs in.. Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 05:56:08

Verb, I liked almost all of your punches but the first had a broken multi and the bum line wasn't a very hard hitting concept. Prod, I didn't think I'd like the verse by the first bar, just a little corny but all in all you had very hard hitting punches that made up where you lacked in rhyming in some places. My votes in, could have gone eitherway. Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 05:56:32

fairs in Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 13:02:43

Damn, close battle. Too close to vote atm.. I know Mad always does his thing, but product came in imo.. Ill be back later. 1 Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-13 14:11:32

verb idk ya build up was off and made the punch a little off but a o.k. verse. product i liked ur wordplay punches was poppin to. multi was ok could have been better but still a good read fvs in went with this guy fellas x out Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 18:05:55

U BOTH GOT SKILLZ Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 18:21:38

so I generally liked what you guys had in this battle. Madverbs, I thought your verse was pretty well executed, everything seemed to flow and rhyme well. At times you got a little irrelevant. It seemed to me that most of your setups were pretty irrelevant to your punch though. It rhymed and all that, but just writing stuff just to rhyme is a problem. Your ideas were pretty average to me. Nothing was dumb; but nothing was standing out to me. Product9, I think you had a few of the same problems as Madverbs. A couple times you just seemed to rhyme stuff just to rhyme. That said, everything rhymed well to me and it was certainly readable. Your ideas were okay to me; but nothing really stood out. Your opener was the best punch in the battle. Some extra points for having wordplay that worked in your verse. Some people can't do the flips consistently. I'll roll with Product here. fair. Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-13 22:34:58

one edge this IMO with better flow and multis. Im back. Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-14 01:37:47

decent battle although imo there was a pretty clear winner. winner came with better concepts, build ups and punches. the loser was touchin on some ok concepts but they came across quite week Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-14 06:50:11

I'll be back to drop a fair Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-14 10:20:17

My winner took this w/ a more consistent drop compared to his opponent. He had the fresher lines in this bout. However there were a few played punches that ended up more like jabs to me. The other had some ideas but was also using a lot of played ish that doesn't work well around here. Need to switch ya style and start thinking more creative w/ your concepts and a couple of multis seemed a bit forced to me. Fairs in though Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-14 16:44:55

MV because of stronger punches and better flow, but P had some nice wordplay Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-14 22:49:24

Too F'in close! Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-15 11:24:34

ine just edged it a little more, good battle tho fv Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-16 00:59:44

fv Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-16 01:24:50

that got my dick partially errect... nice work xx Voted: B U R D E N / -AREA 51-
Posted on: 2013-10-16 10:56:54