the last line is to be sang in the tune of an irish jig..i ran outta linage...so sing it wit an accent damnit Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 14:59:25

no hate just a fair Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 16:13:15

Why didn't you go 16 This lil teen is asking for and extension This fool is inexperienced,his keyboard is his only weapon so get the stepping cause your mic is still checking Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 16:28:22

i knew some idiot was gonna pick up my first properly outlined like battle and take a poop on his keyboard...can i get some help professionals... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 18:02:12

fair Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 18:11:40

hiatus i dont think there is a Ferris Wheel, Cotton Candy Stand, or the hammerbell game at your Fair man....ur Fair consists of pedophile clowns that shoot dope and cause teacup tragedys...that doesnt rhyme or anything just to give u a heads up cause im not sure u know anything Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 18:14:35

forgot one thing, sorry to be a kid about it by you continued the battle in the comment section and look at how much space is left on the battle block...holes wider the ones in the lies you pawn off as your real life Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 19:01:12

i think ripn was very basic with his word selection so it didnt give him much room to expand..nothing really stood out to me..try adding some multis n punches as you continue to write..alias had 2 schemes/bars i enjoy but felt like they couldve been tighter..the double bunks line was pretty good, as the annie/warbucks line had alot of potential..FLY VOTE CLUB Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 19:14:00

Pretty clear who took this battle. Both need A LOT of work....Look at some dopes battles on the site and see how to set up a proper verse (Multis, Punches,Wordplay etc) My winner just showed he has the graspt of multis at times and sort of punches. Fairs in Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 19:37:41

obliged to the constructive critisism, never wrote battle rhymes before as i alsways stuck to free-writing or cyphers and im decent at it so ive been humbled by sorta startin over and learnin to build up to a puch, level out and then blow again. worki nthe mind in new ways givin me newfound respect for talent..But remember just cause one may be a great battler dont me he can battle great..thats Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 19:47:43

Fv, one obviously took it. Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 19:52:45

HAH. Alias --- i like how you were tryin to be humerous with your bars. If you notice some of the battles that go out, the winners are humerous with their bars most of the time.. Its a bloody enigma. Anyway, Not a bad verse. The i just want to kiss you was not such a bad attempt at a punch. It actually did build up nicely. Other than that your verse wasn't cliche, forced wordplay, lack of punches. Just keep battlin you'll pick up. RIP --- ok, not the worse verse i've seen from a newbie. You had some attempts at punches; the knee cap bar. You just need to set-up your bars correctly. Think of a concept first, then work off it. Don't forget to do the basics and fill the box! Just keep grindin buddy. Overall, one was just better here. Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-05 20:34:06

One superbowl a few years ago Joe Namath was on camera drunk as hell and looked at suzie kolber and kept slurrin his speaech sayin "I just wanna kis you, i just wanna kiss you" so if this was 4 years ago that would hit harderha thanks for the constroctive stephen Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-05 20:40:03

Both battles were honestly boring with no excitement or enthusiasm Hand Job had more multiples and a broader vocabulary, but none of it stuck or hit hard and RIPN2U came with some disrespectful shit that made him win the battle. NappyVereen Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-06 11:42:44

FV. NO HATE. PM FOR EXPO Voted: HandJob Alias / RIPN2U
Posted on: 2013-10-06 20:59:14

handjob jacked em off lol he got them for sure on this one!! good shit mayne Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-10-09 22:50:51