Detox is a dr dre album that has never come out but has been rumored to be released for a long time. Salmon migrate up stream (backwards) to spawn. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-08 21:40:10

Judges please........ Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-08 21:42:17

Fav Line OF Battle your flow is ass backwards, you're like KING SALMON UP SHIT 'S CREEK. you see, gay anal sex is the only way HE MANAGED TO SPLIT CHEEKS fv in vb Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-08 21:43:20

Staying active, I like it... [K]ing shit Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-08 23:11:01

Ok one mc shows he understand multi rhyme and had good flow, next step now is to think of punchlines, at the moment he is just straight dissing which is fine but if ur battling someone who swing in some cleaver shots then it's hard to beat them........the other mc show more understanding of concepts and punches, first bar for example is a very light punch but at least it's a punch, however in order for a punch to hit hard it's gotta flow as well, where's the set up and rhyme for this? middle part was filled with rhyme but didn't do much to me tbh, closer was better and the highlight line of the entire battle. if u can stick to this type of shit throughout then u'll be doing fine..... overall one got this with slightly cleaver set up but both have room to elevate. fair vote. Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 00:03:52

Wtf Snoopy? Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 00:15:55

ok apparently i need another expo the line about gay peackocks and won;t come out on his own like dre's detox. he's gay but he wont "come out of the closet" the king salmon line. every other fish swims downstream but salmon who swim up stream and if you are up shits creek and you are a salmon you are "ass backwards with your flow" therefore too weak to cause damage to me Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 01:00:45

Bro, ET don't try to sway. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 03:09:06

ET- first thing i notice, is you actually have somewhat of relavence in buildups which is a great thing to be practicing... ex..your last bar , setsup wit a homo reference then finishes off wit the same idea present.. conceptwise/similes were pretty rudimentary, but still works.. ex. 'come up short' like baby socks.. etc.. you got the right ideas, just need to build on it and strengthen your punches to be harder hitting.or more clever...also, shorten your bars, some ofem are a bit too wordy.. it hurts the flow if you do that..... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 03:59:21

indo- first bar, your setup is way too wordy.. you got like 20 plus syllables..try to keep it down to 14 or less whenever possible..also try to work on relating your first line with your second line.. which is called 'relavent' buildups.. ex. your first bar startes off wit him being rock hard, and thinkin he from the streets.. then , due to how awkward your structure is, i cant tell which is the endrhyme to that couplet.. is it the 'cagel rattle' or is it paying for saddles? you effectively changed your idea to starte talkin bout how he riding for votes... try to start your first line by talkin bout him dr for votes, then end your second line wit a clever concept that relates to it.. also, when doing inner multis, like the 'aims wit the bars' and 'game this retard', you need to use less words inbetween them.. it causes the flow to get choppy and lessen the strenght of your scheme.. last thing is tighten up the syllable counts in your multis, ex.. cage 'll rattle, and paying for saddles.. 4 syllables and 5 syllables.. is mismatched.. and TOO HARD TO SEE, doesnt match wit MASTER PRISON KEY... the only thing that rymes is KEY... which is actually 1 syllable... anyway, my winner just had a better written verse from a fundamental standpoint..fairs in. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 04:20:26

gb, better drops.......fv Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 06:13:59

i was surprised. Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 09:43:17

My winner edged this in terms of fresh concepts while the other had some nice lines but didn't come as creative. Fairs in Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 12:48:06

should of been 6-5 (no order) Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 12:48:50

my winner has the basic idea of battling down, its just very basic at the moment. u know u need to set up ur punches with relevant shit and u did do that here, just on a very low level. ur punches cud use being a few notches harder. i think u have the basics down but need to up the complexity. my loser lacked that set up edge that the winner bought here and also the structure of the verse really affects the readability so it doesnt come off as smooth. multi count was a bit hit n miss too. Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 13:05:07

Both kinda need to work on the same things reading the other voters theres not much more i can say in terms of advice its all there for you be sure to read it and take it on board ... Im leaning this way Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 13:16:45

my winner got dis one IMO fairs in Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-09 20:37:23

Didnt realize u were in chloro. Et. I cant vote in this one..my vote deleted. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-09 22:51:23

Chloro! Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-08-10 04:50:15

Nice Jabs and concepts from one took this! and I saw some lapses I couldn't quite overlook from the other, Fairs in...no hate @ all! Had to vote. Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-11 01:20:58

def close, but idk what it is bout my winners verse but shit did it for me. Dope Shit Homies. no hate. Drop A FAIR BACK!!!!! Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-11 01:39:54

he couldn't "unlock his caged bars" if he had a MASTER PRISON KEY! ......that line got me goin Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-11 06:02:35

my winner seemed to stick to just 1 topic to attack his opponent which took out some of the impact that his punches might of packed, but it was enough to top his competition. his opponent had some played bars and soft jabs. they barely were hittin which def caused my decision. start workin on those multis and set ups also or else ya ish wont flow smoothly. y'all keep elevatin tho, fair's in Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-11 16:26:51

Close battle fv Voted: ET the Refugee / Indonesia
Posted on: 2013-08-11 19:15:48