dam I gotta give dat to ya, see "picking up porno's" the closet you get to TOUCHING X.. that was cold Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-06 10:08:13

A contrast of good structure vs no structure. Javael's verse is virtually unreadable. Voted: Javael Buchanan / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-06-08 03:06:29

EXPO ---- ======= Javae l ======= I tried reading your verse, I couldn't even break it down.It's too many lines, with no centre meaning what so ever so. Sorry i couldn't break it down man.Please add breaks once you are done w/ a concept and punchline.There was virtually no structurally and wording was fucked.Your rhymes were pretty basic, and did nothing worth to showcase your skills.Step your game up and PM if you need help. ======== X-C al ======= See i HOPE TO BOMB ACTS that CHOKE ON WRONG FACTS cuz i spit the truth see Only time "Ja rule a script" was when murder ink WROTE HIS CONTRACT ---------- -- Ok a pretty cool bar, had a centre meaning and actually have that punch factor... --------- -------------------- -- Ill have you eating these bars like it was LIPS TO STEEL WHERE you SHIT CAN FEEL THERE, RIPPED TO FEEL BEAR now ive exposed ya gums to feel this HIT IS REAL FAIR So watch This "Crip a fall" (cripple) like i TIPPED HIS WHEELCHAIRI -------------- Ok the concept was played, but I felt the multi stretched at ends.Shorten this up w/ a concept of your own and you'll be good to go. --------------- ------- Stay THRUSTING TEXT down these BUSTERS KNECKS so fuck what you MUSTER NEXT see "picking up porno's" the closet you get to TOUCHING X.. ------------------ --------------- Tha t line had be crack up.It's pretty funny man and I appreciate your creativity here. ============ Overall a pretty one sided spar, one edged it in all areas. Loser take note of the winner. Voted: Javael Buchanan / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-06-08 06:00:16

one outweighed the other in every single category....the other had Dow, no punches..slight jobs. nothing to hard, neither did the either but came off nice enuff to take this......GONZO VOTE/// Voted: Javael Buchanan / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-06-08 08:21:52

Alright my choice was fresher in every aspect such as concepts, set-ups, multies, flow, punches and metaphors.. He could still have been a lot better though while his opponent lacked in each one of those aspects so my suggestion is to check out some vet battles.. Look up some battles from UNKNOWN ARTIST, RULE and DaDDiO to better understand how to execute a strong punch.. Voted: Javael Buchanan / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-06-08 10:31:25