Ill drop that Fair and Expo after work since it's a 16. Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-07 14:41:19

Ehhh O.k battle here, nothing heavy. My winner came with more consistency but still had fairly weak concepts with some really played lines. However the lines were alot more relevant and he had more punches overall. The loser's lines were extremely played and at times didn't completely rhyme (meaning broken multies) and then he fell in to straight dissing (both of them did but moreso the loser) Consistencey is what got this. But both of yall need to up the content. Fairs in. Pm for further expo or tips and advice. Unfortunately these were pretty generous rates considerin it was a 16. Keep elevatin. Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-07 20:59:24

Ok im goign to try keep this short and simple. POSEIDON - Lets "sea" what we have here. Opener was clean but the punch was not very good. Too much filler in my opinion with some played out lines fam, the concepts were very dull due to the lack of build ups. Multis were on point throughout and kept the consistency of your bars flowing but now work on developing your concepts and setting up your punches in a much more clever manner. Your structure was good, the vocab was decent here but complexity was missing and lack of punch power too. Basics are down but most areas might need some polishing up, some more then others, overall: Not Bad just Keep Elevating fam. [Stand Out Line: 9th Line]. LEGIT - Where 2 start. Straight off the bat you dropped a broken Multi, DOG YOU SOUND BITCH MADE (5), ON-LY TIME HE GET LAID (6), YOU FUCKING FRUIT CAKE (5)... so yeah watch out for that fam, good attempt with the rebuttal but that Multi spoilt it for me. As i continue to read i saw that it was major flaw in your drop fam , you had a lot of broken Multis which can be ignored once but not in this situation which there was many. I can spot a few in here which is not good at all, especially when you open up with a broken Multi. Punches were played but they did their job which was attack your opponent, most were not very good. There was a hint of decent concepts in there but none if them were really utilized. The vocab was also not too good here, i read FUCK alot of times so yeah polish up that vocab fam. Overall: A Mediocre drop but a lot of aggression shown which is good. [Stand Out Line: #12.]. My winner just was more consistent and kept his drop clean, not strong but clean. Fairs In. APOC: Scream On'em Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-08 04:32:44

Low to Mid. Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-08 04:35:03

nothing heavy from either, but i have ma winner.... Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-08 09:22:30

king- some fairly basic concepts im seeing, ex. flow stinks like cat litter? what i did like was the fact you stayed consistent wit matching multis, thruout.. now you need to work on adding stronger metas and wordplay... setup your ideas and throw a strong punch... JMONEY-dude first off, alot of dudes on this site, caps multis... end rhymes are considered multis when each word or sound rhymes... ex.. CAT IN THE HAT=RAPPIN WIT SMACK= CATCHIN A RAT.=4 SYLLABLES that flow and compound words that rhyme.... whats not considered a multi is ex.... DOG -YOU- SOUND- BITCH MADE /ONLY -TIME-HE-GET-LAID.. 5 syllables/6syllables ... =mismatched ..and DOG YOU doesnt rhyme wit ONLY.. and BITCH MADE doesnt rhyme wit GET LAID... the only thing that does match at all is MADE/LAID.. hence making it a 1syllable end rhyme, and not even considered a multi... my advice is work on learning proper multi techniques before you even begin to cap words at all... because emphasizing the wrong words wit caps is not gonna garner you any points... what i did like was you tried to integrate similes, ex.. clap like END OF SPEECH... really basic concepts, but still concepts.. work on your schemes first then start learning how to add stronger similes.. etc... winner here had cleaner more polished schemes,, punch wise,, both needs some work.. fairs in... Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-10 02:01:49

fv Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-10 06:15:56

one i felt just carried a better tempo Voted: KING POSEIDON / Jmoneyakagunshot
Posted on: 2013-05-10 11:00:41