Killed'em... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-11 01:24:07

Good read hadmto read it twice ... Grief ... Felt you had the comcepts but towarss the end ya shit sorta fell off fam the tries and tries multi joints didnt work for me the the Christmas lights punch could of been worded better ... Star Wars was ight just felt a bit choppy ... I dont like slanted rhymes either when you use the last sylabel of a word the carry a multi rhyme scheme your better than that .... Dissizit ... First bar was coo like the carried away son baby and stork punch was on point like the the Tony the Tiger punc too made me chuckle but then i sorta felt you went off track abit towarss the end of ya verse also and you started to do the slanted rhyme taking the last sylabel from a word to carry a multie .... Anyways i felt one just hit a bit cleaner with build ups and concepts of punches dope battle tho ... FV .:X:. Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-11 04:59:57

GG, first bar was dope as fuck. Nice flow and swagger to it lol. The end concept wasn't like that outside of the box, but it's execution was very nice. The next bar was alright but the multies were sort of off to me(ative juices and play my groupings?). It took away from the bar that was already only a little above average anyways. The next bar was nice with everything in the setup being relevant and the Padme wordplay was fresh and original. The next bar was meh. I get it but it's sort of a self-hype bar cuz you did somewhat take a jab at him but then you ended the bar with just you bragging, not insulting your opponent. The closer was just alright too. The concept was neat but the execution could have been better like the "Lacks Despite Practice" multie seemed sort of oddly phrased. Overall, this was an alright verse. Some nice bars and some just alright ones. Not bad though... Diss, your first bar was just a bunch of one line jabs tied together by multies. There was no setup, therefore there was no punch. Just jabs. The next bar was short and compact. It was supposed to be comedic but it didn't come off too well. It came off sort of lame. The next bar was pretty nice, however the end concept with Tony The Tiger and Great. I've heard stuff similar to it several times, so it isn't that fresh or original but it was still pretty decent. The next bar I've actually critiqued before lol. You didn't take my advice in changing the multies. Misguide All Traps and Confide All Facts don't really make complete sense. Like I get what your going at but the words aren't being used correctly. But The E.T. Wet Willy concept is dope as fuck. That shit was nice. The last bar was also pretty dope. The Cause Medics/Cosmetics wordplay is pretty fresh and was executed nicely. Overall, you had some dope shit and some meh shit. Inconsistency was your problem here... OVERALL, I am voting in favor of this person because their game all-around was better here. They were more consistent. The other had more highlights with creativity, but they did not execute as well. And the ideas are about 40% of battling. The other 60% is strictly execution. If you have an idea and can't convey it properly, then it is a waste. That's why the fair is in and this way. Good battle though fellas. Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-11 15:14:46

Keep it moving, Stoopid. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-11 16:27:17

Murda she wrote.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-06-13 14:31:47

Really just thought the winners verse had more entertaining punchlines. Basically what my vote came down to because both were decent verses. Good spar. Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-13 15:20:40

Keeping this real I expected more from both of you. One just seemed to remain perfectly consistent the whole way through. Maybe the other was rusty or something. Ultimately one bar took this for me. got it at 7-7 Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-13 16:26:05

Perfectly consistent as in the level he brought to the table never decreased throughout the best. although he can go harder Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-13 16:28:56

This was fairly one sided imo.. one had a bit more clever concepts and setups were done well..loser had some hits but felt jabbish.. other concepts were either played or forced due to wording.. multis were nice complexity wise.. fairs in Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-13 17:41:37

no expo..cuz yall already know.. Voted: GOOD GRIEF / Phracture
Posted on: 2013-06-13 17:51:43