Expos: In the mask of zorro the main character (Zorro) carves Z into peoples chests, Tom cruise flys jets in the movie top gun, Kenny from southpark never shows his face other then in the movie (so not on tv) and Anamorph is a book about kids who turn into creatures over night.... Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-21 20:30:12

Expo: Ive never stole lyrics lol Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-21 23:55:53

BULLLY SWAGGGGAH Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-22 03:31:18

Lets do this .... Manhattan ... Bar1 ... For me that multi scheme wasn't working if you'd placed the, in between each other would of flowed alot better punch wasn't to strong either 6/10 poor opener .... Bar2 ... This time it was ight not to much filler between the multis helped the flow concept of the punch was cool but felt it could of been worded better to hit harder 7.5/10 ... Bar3 ... Yeh solid bar solid punch liked this 8/10 ... Bar4 ... Hmmm punch was cool but flow was off with the multies and build up could of been fiya 6.5/10 ... Bar5 ... Punch was cool but wtf with Akon cd multie seemed forced to me famo 6/10 ... Bar6 ... I liked the liquor line but again could of been worded so much better ... And ya cheeky little closer was ight ill mark im together 7.5/10 ..... Right zantastic your verse ..... Bar1 ... Hmmm i get the punch build up wasn't all that poor,opener for me 6/10 ... Bar2 ... I like this punch but as manhattan has pointed out he has never bitten anyone lyrics so this bar becomes useless in terms of an insult imma five it 4/10 for the fact you accusing someone of something they ain't done .... Bar3 ... Hmmm not digging this to much filler between multies plus the multies where off and punch was lacking 5/10 ... Bar4 ... Yeh best bar so far this flowed nice punch was pretty sick i can fuck with this 8/10 ... Bar5 ... Short little bar with a punch was ight nothing wow coo concept was thinking of using this myself 7/10 ... Bar6 ... Nope multies where out on this strawberry punch just wasn't working for me filler at best 5/10 .... Take it from the top punch concept is played done seen this many times before and again the multies where off and ya closer was ight concept was cool but could of been worded so much better so your closing bars imma give 6/10 ........ So for me although one had more punches you didn't execute your build ups and had to many multies that where off .... The other dude was trying a different rhyme scheme this shit i was worried about in the first bar but shit went on to flow well and deliver some nice bars .... My winner is ..... FV VBF .:X:. Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 06:12:58

Lol pretty landslide here. Manhattan- Had very consistent setups and punches. You kept the flow and multi scheme pretty tight that just really added to te overall effect of the verse. Some good lines in there. I felt the closer was a little weak in comparison to the test of your verse, idk if it was the it was presented or if it was te actual punch but it just seemed a little weaker in comparison to your other punches. I'm Willing to bet it was the lack of setups for that singular punchlines cuz you kept a jab jab punch thing goin and that was just off but I did like the concept. Good shit. Zan- You actually had some pretty good concepts I'm there, you need to work on you execution though. Alot of the ways you executed the punch were really obscure. You could tell by the way you expo'd. You expo really just should cover parts of a verse that people wouldn't understand because they hasn't seen a movie or something, but it shouldn't have to explain the actual concept. Keeping a balance of conceptuality but still have a high degree of clarity is essential. Another thing, making false accusations like him biting lines isn't very valid in a battle unless its a known fact, false personals are a no-no. You came with some played concepts that added to the overall inconsistency of your verse. To me it just felt like a hit and miss verse where a little more polishing of your execution and setups would've made the verse A LOT better. Also remember don't make your lines confirm o your multies cuz alot of your rhyming was multi filler and didn't really make much sense if taken out of context. A verse being read should sound like actual conversation. Overall my winner took this with lines that connected and more consistency. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-22 07:15:20

I was going to give Dr Manhattan a 9 but in the end i felt he didn't hit hard enough, a bit landslide, but fairs in fellas. Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 11:58:31

Damn it's a little cold in here.. Who turned on the ACs? Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-22 15:05:39

Aces up, Jets down! Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-22 15:11:48

My winner just had the heavier drop and his punches were much harder then the losers. The loser needs to work on the complexity of his concepts as well as develop much more heavier punches. So yeah the winner basically outclassed his opponent. Fv In. Low to Low. APOC UP Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 17:12:53

My choice was more consistent and packed stronger punches and also executed his concepts nicely... Both had good multies and flow.. My choice was good all the way through while his opponent had some ok ideas but could of worded his bars differently and came a little more complex.. Overall good battle.. Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 17:54:58

ACishhhhhhhh Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-22 19:56:40

tbh my winner outwrote his opponent here..the last bar was sick..fairs in Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 23:43:41

i type a huge expo and only the ending shows up^^^?????? Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-22 23:44:58

One set up his punches in a slick fashion w/ relevant multies which helped his execution. The other had some cool ideas but lacked the know how to outbox his opponent. Needs to work on his delivery and the set ups are key. I got one here with the better verse for me. Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-23 09:42:19

Bullshit Zan quit swaying faggot Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-23 15:34:01

Fv Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-23 17:11:52

one was clearly levels higher than the other. smoother read on one side as well as better puns got this. there were a few decent puns on the losers side. Voted: Manhattan /
Posted on: 2013-04-24 16:31:12