Doubt ill get this but send me 8 if you want Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-14 12:54:47

Well I did get it good luck bran Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-14 13:24:17

damn. started out a lil shaky for x but he killed it sick had consistence throughout but i felt his punches hit softer Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-14 13:27:17

M.A.D..good battle guys Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-14 13:38:47

gb fellas, one really impressed here GS home brew. fairs in. Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-14 13:55:13

Clear winner here. One brought out the punches to the table which is why he will win this bout. Other you need to work on creativity and having punchlines in every scheme. Learn from your opponent Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-14 16:03:33

My choice got this with stronger punches due to his set-ups and concepts but here are some tips for his opponent.. Multies - Be sure to always provide multies that are at least 3-6 syllables cuz multies help with the flow and punch and if you dont know what a multie is then its the words that rhymes with each other when your going from line to line.. And always make sure the syllable count is exact and dont force your multies which means make sure there relevant... Take this for example again.... 'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK".... The words that are capitalized are my multies... So the words that are capped in my 1st line rhyme with the words that are capped in my 2nd which makes them multies... Always cap your multies and also always fill in your box... Set-ups - These are very important because they make the punch stronger... I showed you an example of what a set-up is when i was explaning the importance of punchlines... Always make sure your set-up has relevance to your multie/punch or else it will be seen as just filler... Your set-up leaves the reader wanting more and be sure to make your set-ups stand out by putting something around them such as ' ' or " " or ` ` will work just fine so that the reader knows exactly what your talking about... Do not decorate your verse either with different types of symbols like ~ or // or anything of that matter... Punchlines - Punches should always be executed strongly and in order to do so you want some strong set-ups with good concepts... Heres a bar of mine i used in the past...'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK"... Everything inside of the ' ' has to do with class and oral favors lol so those are set-ups for my punch which is inside the " " and the use of understanding was used as wordplay cuz under standing dick means under an erect dick and understanding dick means she understands it... You wanna provide punch after punch after punch and humiliate your opponent....Great concepts - Talking about someones mom is old unless there is creativity involved with it but the concept is very juvenile so try speaking on things that are going on in the news or with celebrities or evening talk about a volcano but make sure you convert it into a punchline and attack the hell out of your opponent.. theres so much to rap about and saying someones mom is fat or a hoe is very basic... Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-15 17:22:23

one dropped alot of nameflips, most ofem landing. other poor end rymes, and needs to learn what to cap and what not to... pretty onesided snipe... Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-16 01:51:05

+1 phenom's vote.lol Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-16 01:52:23

ONE WOZ DEFINATELY MORE CONSISTANT THROUGHOUT AN HAD HARDER HITS, 'END TO HAPPY' BY TAKIN THIS 'KID OUTTA THA PLAYROOM' haha NICE LINE, HAPPY HAD A DECENT FLOW AN SOME NICE IDEAS JUS NEED TA KEEP BATTLIN AN KEEP ELEVATIN.....FAIRS IN....holla Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-16 11:50:11

gb fv, one is of bigger calibur Voted: HappySickness / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-17 09:16:55