pay*** the price (fail) Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 18:27:42

Good luck bro .... .:X:. Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 18:40:05

looks like I need it, nice Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 18:41:50

STAR's VERSE WOZ READABLE AN FLOWED OK JUS NEED TO KEEP BATTLIN AN ELEVATIN.......X WOZ A BIT OF AH BULLY HERE, I SHOULD GIVE HIM AN INFRACTION TBH haha, BUT HES WORKIN HIS WAY BACK SO WE'LL LET IT SLIDE.....GOOD LINES HERE X LIKED THA METEOR SHOWER AN ELECTRICITY LINES......FAIRS IN,....holla Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-13 19:35:20

X-calibur didn't go easy on this one :Punches leave you BLEEDING-FOR-HOURS leave you drained NEEDING-MORE-POWER cuz X's punches will bring star to earth like a METEOR-SHOWER. The opener really got me on this one. Didn't really feel the punches from Star. No hate FV Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-13 20:14:54

Thanks for expo Dave yeh whoops on the syllable typing to quick I guess and not thinking to much Comment Only
Posted on: 2013-04-13 21:40:52

One took this in every aspect of what makes a good battle verse. A broken multi but that's it...some nice punches and a smooth flow w/ the multis. Other you can learn a thing or two from your opponent here. Look at battles from guys like Reefer,UA, RULE, Daddio and see how they structure bars and set up punchlines to help you elevate. Fairs in low to low Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-14 15:39:11

one sided here.. one did just enough to win wit concepts and complexity in schemes..loser just pretty basic, endrhymes and content.. Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-15 02:00:12

My choice got this with stronger punches due to his nice set-ups and good concepts.. Here are some tips for his opponent.. Multies - Be sure to always provide multies that are at least 3-6 syllables cuz multies help with the flow and punch and if you dont know what a multie is then its the words that rhymes with each other when your going from line to line.. And always make sure the syllable count is exact and dont force your multies which means make sure there relevant... Take this for example again.... 'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK".... The words that are capitalized are my multies... So the words that are capped in my 1st line rhyme with the words that are capped in my 2nd which makes them multies... Always cap your multies and also always fill in your box... Set-ups - These are very important because they make the punch stronger... I showed you an example of what a set-up is when i was explaning the importance of punchlines... Always make sure your set-up has relevance to your multie/punch or else it will be seen as just filler... Your set-up leaves the reader wanting more and be sure to make your set-ups stand out by putting something around them such as ' ' or " " or ` ` will work just fine so that the reader knows exactly what your talking about... Do not decorate your verse either with different types of symbols like ~ or // or anything of that matter... Punchlines - Punches should always be executed strongly and in order to do so you want some strong set-ups with good concepts... Heres a bar of mine i used in the past...'Class is in session for ya hoe', so as my belt BUCKLES SMOTHERED im RAMMING LIPS I gave her 'sex ed' and she passed the 'educational facial' with "no TROUBLE UNDER STANDING DICK"... Everything inside of the ' ' has to do with class and oral favors lol so those are set-ups for my punch which is inside the " " and the use of understanding was used as wordplay cuz under standing dick means under an erect dick and understanding dick means she understands it... You wanna provide punch after punch after punch and humiliate your opponent....Great concepts - Talking about someones mom is old unless there is creativity involved with it but the concept is very juvenile so try speaking on things that are going on in the news or with celebrities or evening talk about a volcano but make sure you convert it into a punchline and attack the hell out of your opponent.. theres so much to rap about and saying someones mom is fat or a hoe is very basic... Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-15 16:57:53

one had better concepts,one sided tbh Voted: STARcitySGT / X-Calibur
Posted on: 2013-04-16 10:30:13