eazy.. liked your flow.. better than the other.. good battle tho Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-07-30 13:06:24

No Hate. Fv. Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-07-30 13:11:33

fv Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-07-31 00:56:08

shock vote Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-07-31 12:18:29

Rizzem: First Line Was Confusing, I Didn't Get The Defense(The Fence) Part. Plus Don't Say You Spit Decent Dude It Makes You Look Bad Even If Your Just Starting Out Try To Go For A More Confident Approach. The Rhyming Was Okay, Decent With The One Words But Still They Rhymed. I Also Didn't Get How You Making Him Think It's An Attack Effects Him In Some Way. Anyways, Next Line Okay. The "Joke" Was Pretty Basic Though. Try To Think Of More Creative Ways Of Dissing Your Opponent Don't Just Go For Name Calling. Also I Don't Know Why You Capitalized Second (Not A Big Deal Though Just Doesn't Look Right). Also See It And Shitty Don't Really Rhyme Unless You Slant Them But Even Then Use Words That Rhyme Better. Next Bit Was Pretty Out Of Place, I Think You Were Trying To Rhyme See It With Fiat (Fe AWT) But They Don't Rhyme Either And The Joke Wasn't On Point. Finisher Was Weak. Overall You've Gotta Work On Rhyming Words That Are More Perfect Rhymes For Example: Camp, Ramp, Lamp, Etc.) Also, You've Got The Idea Of Punchlines So Just Try To Be More Creative With Your Jokes (Punchlines) And Make Sure Everything Rhymes And You'll Be On Your Way. Feel Free To PM If You Have Any Questions Too. I'mma Give You A 5 For Slightly Below Not Bad. IndicaL: First Line Was Cool, Like How You Flipped His Line Right From The Start. Second Line Was Okay Too, You've Got The Basics Down Just Keep Being More Creative With Your Lines And You'll Do Much Better. Next Line's Punchline Was Okay But Try To Relate Both Parts With Each Other. Last Line/Finisher Was Cool Again I Liked How You Flipped His Line But Again Try To Be More Creative Dude. Overall Just Work On Rhyming Longer Words/And Eventually Two, Three Words And Thinking Out Of The Box More With Your Punches And You'll Be On Right Track. Overall I'mma Give You A 5 For Not Bad. Also, Feel Free To PM Me If You Have Any Questions As Far As Punchlines, Multi's, Wordplays, Etc. Go. Decent Battle Guys But I Expect Y'all To Do Much Better Next Time. -Student Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-08-02 14:03:12

fv Voted: Rizzem / IndicaL
Posted on: 2012-08-02 18:20:51