both did well Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-28 03:51:04

gb Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-28 04:38:33

bLACC MAMBA FROM WILD BOYS?? Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-28 04:51:28

Nah Im from the Sandpeople. We based in Desoto Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-28 08:52:34

This was a sub-par battle. Both emcees were very weak in terms of damage dealt with bars. One emcee had a few 'ehh' lines. The said emcee had a line in his verse which would've had GREAT potential if preceded with the correct setups. Everything else in said emcee's verse was mediocre at best. One emcee used VERY basic rhyme schemes and had no potential/standout/n oticeable lines whatsoever. I think the emcee I'm referring to needs to work on his multies. They can create/participate in cyphers that help them develop multies and whatnot. Also, what said emcee can focus on is their dissing ability. Their verse seemed to be a mixture of half-diss and half-flex, the latter shouldn't be done at all. Maybe, cyphers such as "Diss the emcee above you" may guide them in the right direction. One emcee had an idea of dissing. Their VERY PLAYED attempts at wordplay has shown me that. However, I think wordplays/nameplays should be avoided at this early a stage. Maybe developing a better sense of punches and creating longer rhyme schemes can shape this emcee into a decent battler. Fair's in and good luck to both. Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-28 11:48:17

Blacc Mamba: First Line Wasn't Great To Start Out With. Try To Never Use The Same Word To Rhyme UNLESS Your Making The Word Before It Rhyme. (And In This Case You Said "You Boy" 3 Times) So For Example If You Said: when i'm RHYMING BOY you'll be CRYING BOY...etc.) Next Line Was Alright. I Don't Know Why You Would Say That You May Lose Though, That's Not A Good Look. The Twista Punch Was Okay, Not Really That Hard Hitting But It's Still A Punch. The Mortal Kombat Line Was Okay Too. The Wordplay (Using Two Words, Or Multiple Words, That Sound The Same But Are Spelled Differently) Was Weak But Still You Get Some Props For Using It So Early On In Your Time Here. The Last Part Of That Wasn't That Great Though, Whenever You Say You'll Blow Someone It Sounds Homo, No Offense. Still It Was A Punch, Weak But Still It's A Start. I Don't Get How In The Next Part John Woo & Eric Moo Are Related? Try To Make Your Whole Line Relate To Each Other And You'll Be More Correct. Finisher Was Kinda Weak, I Would've Ended It With Another Punch If I Were You. Overall I'mma Give You A 5 For Not Bad, You Had Two Punchlines And Your Vocabulary Wasn't Terrible. Just Keep Working On Those Punchlines And Try To Make Them More Creative. Also, Keep Everything Relevant As In Each Line, They Don't All Have To Tie As A Verse But Just Per Line Keep It All Together. Feel Free To PM Me If You Have Any Questions Or You Need Help With This Text Stuff. 956-D-town chino: First Line Isn't That Great. I Don't Get How Him Having No Dick Would Cause Him To Slither Around The Floor. Try To Make Your Disses More Creative And Rhyme Longer Words (And After A While Multiple Words). The Next Bit Was Okay Rhyming Wise (Weak Though, Use Better / Longer Words) But Drain Your Poison? I Don't Get It. I Don't Know When This Next Line Ends Cause All You Have Is Commas. The Next Line(s) / Finisher Were Pretty Much The Same As The Start. Here's Some Advice, Try To Indicate Your Ending A Verse By Using A Exclamation Point ! Or A Period . It Helps People Who Are Reading Your Verse Know Where The Next Line Begins. Also, Keep Your Rhyme Words At The End To Have Your Verse Flow Better (You Can Throw Words In The Middle But You've Got To Have Words At The End) It's Essential. I'm Not Gonna Confuse You With Bringing Up Punchlines/Multi's/W ordplay/Similies/Etc . So I'll Just Say For Now, Work On Rhyming Bigger Words Together And Keeping Them At The End. Overall I'mma Give You A 3 For Slightly Under Not Bad But I See Some Potential In You, Keep Working On It Man. Also, Feel Free To PM Me If You Have Any Questions. -Student Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-30 13:59:05

meh one was better here. Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-30 16:02:56

Not the best.Keep spitting boys.FV Voted: Blacc Mamba / True Dynasty
Posted on: 2012-07-31 01:00:00