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Posted on: 2012-07-25 19:50:51

Expo: White Out = Type Of Printing By "Inserting Leads".... Gandalf The Grey Turned 'White' After He Was Beaten Dead.... Everything Else Is Really Simple But Still Too Complex For You Kiddos Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-25 20:20:42

not very often do i enjoy what i was reading today i found entertainment in words lmao jk jk good shit voted fair first line took my vote Voted: Nicky Warz / Lizman
Posted on: 2012-07-26 00:54:27

Fya- To start with DONT talk about yourself in a battle, focus on dissing your opponent every bar. When you did attempt a punch i felt it was not very creative due to weak concepts and poor structure. Mix that in with broken multies and you really have a lot of areas to improve on. I liked the flow just pay attention to detail fam. LIZ- your first bar was actually decent having said that it took four lines to get to the punch, thats waaay too long fam. After the opener you went back to the same ol liz with confusing schemes multies that didnt work and attempted to do wayyyy to much with your bars. Keep it simple lizzy. . . Overall I liked both reads In think one was a little better w/concepts making his punches more damaging. FAIRS IN Voted: Nicky Warz / Lizman
Posted on: 2012-07-26 12:32:09

Ait so heres the deal.. Its actually okay to talk about yourself in battles but pref. Longer battles.. Adds that swag factor.. But yo.. Fya your multis need work.. You have a good structure.. Stay away from multis like WEAK OR TOO".. They were capped for no reason n messes up the flow.. Work on addin more punches. Try not to drag out the same concepts in 8 liners n maxamize the space wit punches.. Liz there were a couple good moments but try n keep the unorthadox punches to a minimum.. U have a problem with multis aswell.. Also your lines take awhile to get to the punch somtimes.. Fya.. On the plus side u understand punches.. Just need more creativity.. Liz.. You understand complexity.. Should prolly try other/more generic punches.. Try your hand at wordplay fam. Monsta vote Voted: Nicky Warz / Lizman
Posted on: 2012-07-27 03:59:08

One edged with complexity n a better understanding of how to setup a decent punch. Voted: Nicky Warz / Lizman
Posted on: 2012-07-27 04:00:54

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Posted on: 2012-07-27 05:50:17