Found some old bars, thought i'd throw them out there. Good luck! CLASSICK! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-25 16:40:28

fairs in. one was real nice w/it. the other . . .needs to elevate, a lot. super snipe. Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-25 16:49:53

classed that ass Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-25 17:09:17

fair dropped... Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-25 19:16:12

Mega snipe ...its seen Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-25 19:47:35

CLASSICK !! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-25 19:50:26

one got buried. obvious win, Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-25 20:15:29

REVAN SEND BEEF i TRULY THINK YOUR TRASH. Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-25 22:57:37

Misscigar-Let me start by saying you shouldnt use slashes(/) after each line. It takes up space in which you could use for more words. Next, alot of your stuff didnt rhyme.And when it did,it was single syllable. For example 'Sixes' and 'Simple' do not rhyme. I see where you could think that they are slant rhymes, but they really arent. Try to keep slant rhymes to a minimum..and when you do use them, let it be with 3+ syllable words.*ex.Battling/S macking me) It will sound alot smoother and more like a perfect rhyme. Now when you did rhyme(ex.Reign/Name) it was single syllable...I realize your fairly new so ill tell you as a forewarning, multi syllable rhymes are VERY effective and voters look for them in verses.U could have said 'u know im boss so i REIGN SUPREME & CAME TO REEK havok on this faggot, his middle NAME IS WEAK!(just an example). See how instead of 1 syllable rhyming i was rhyming 3 syllables together?And it sounded much nicer right?Okay.Next, work on 'concepts/flips'. What these are, are lines that "make the reader think". for example.'He's shit talking, guess ive WOKEN THE INSTIGATOR, but ill spoil this beef like BROKEN REFRIGERATORS' get it??Ahhh. See?made ya think. Last, focus on punchlines. You bragged alot about yourself (ex.I run the world).instead of talking about yourself so much, focus on clowning your opponent.You could do this with nameplay,dissing where he's repping, dissing his rank. etc. Oh and watch what you capitilize, ONLY cap multi syllable rhymes.keep elevating Revan-Goo d concepts but the 'little off the top' one is played out. So try to keep it fresh with original ideas. As far as i can see your multies were on point so thats all good.Like i told misscigar, dont use so much *decorations*...use that space for extra words&rhymes. Now earlier i said your concepts were pretty good, and they are, but you lacked personals...You could have did something about the fact that he/she is a new comer.(ex.Its like you just hit puberty your a New Comer/cummer')You said in one of your comments that u just found some bars and threw em out there. Dont do that, write each verse specifically for the person your battling(unless ur droping an open). This leaves room for personals/ punches etc. to leave the readers going OHHHH!! and dropping higher votes. No hate to either, theres always room for improvement. Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-26 00:23:46

fv no h8 gb clear winner tho.. ne probs send bars... Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-26 01:06:46

Revan drop was too Much for Misscigar but not a bad drop either cigar Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-26 05:18:38

Who is this Revan guy? He needs to step his game up. He's whack as fuck................ .. =P Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-26 10:53:12

Misscigar- Theres absolutly nothing wrong with putting a slash (/) at the end of your bar (despite what AC's Bitch might say), It is a perfectly effective way to show your audience when your bar ends to avoid confusion with any readability issues the voter may have in regards to that matter. Ok, anyways...First thing i can clearly see wrong with the verse is your multies (Im also assuming you may have an accent). Im going to go out on a limb and say you are fairly new to this site so i dont expect you to know this (or anything im about to say for that matter). The main issue with new comers to Text is that they naturally assume it is just a notepad for your audio writtens, in a sense, but text and audio is much differnt. There is ALOT more too it as far as multies are concerned. Single syllable multies are virtually extinct to anyone who knows how to properly construct a text verse on Letsbeef.com. Me personally i prefer to use 4 or more and will RARLEY use any less because those amounts show that you can add a decent amount of complexity in just your rhyme scheme alone in the voters eye (Side note: BE CAREFUL with wording when doing this though. The wrong words will have your scheme sounding forced and unatractive to the tounge which is a no-no!). On a educational note, Check out UNKNOWN ARTIST. He is one of the best at his smooth, percise wording with multies on this site and could often win a battle on that alone Next thing i noticed is your lack of diversity in the aspects of Text battling (Eg Metaphors, Wordplay, etc). These are CRUCIAL to a text verse if you ever want to get far on this site, they are basically expected nowadays. For and example of clever, "thoughts outside the box" concepts, i would recomend checking out RULE (lol)....For another example of the majors, say wordplay, i would recomend NawkOut (Both of these fellas are perfect examples in both catagories i listed). One small small positive thing was flow, it was there but, unfortunatly that isnt nearly enough to win a text battle. Final tip: Try to bring the feeling of a Live Battle into the mix but NEVER forget this is a visual Text battle (Live battles bring the right mix of the majority aspects of Text, spoken into words)......Revan- I wont get into to much detail as far as examples of "who you should check out" on certain aspect of Texting, due to the fact that you are usualy the example itself, but i will however critique your verse at hand. As far as multies go, an acceptable syllable count was there, i did however notice a few "questionable" wording schemes, Eg: DAMN YOUR RAPPIN? MEHH and TRANSPORT ACCIDENT.....The wording for this was terrible and damn near ruined the bar. Another flaw i noticed was the line count for the first bar (3 1/2) which is far too many lines for an 8 line battle for just one bar. I started to lose interest, half way through the 3rd line because of it (the concept meta was nice but...) In a 32, even a 16 it would be acceptable, but not an 8. You want to try your best at keeping punches short and sweet with these battles to maximize the execution factor. Overall: One was much more dominant and diverse in ALL aspects of this Text Battle. I cant say that i was impressed by either verse, but i try and collect my comments into constructive criticisim. This clutch to all my votes and i must be honest to better ALL battlers, its my job. My fair has been mixed. Best of luck to both of you and i look forward to seeing elevation. Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-26 17:16:59

It's pretty clear Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-27 14:52:35

wat Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-27 22:58:14

new vs vet... new one got sum good stuff ideas nd watchamacallt, vet...old bars snippin , dude... but the fair is in Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-28 04:16:27

fv Voted: misscigar / RULE
Posted on: 2012-07-28 14:36:15