Exiled loved the opener nice play on words, it sorta lost its punch line hardness near the end though. Swisher, your lines were decent dont get me wrong, but you should try playing on words more and try some other rhyming techniques instead of AA BB AA BB mix it up. Good battle though, dont like it, send 8 Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-25 07:23:39

both were a bit basic, i think one came out a bit fresher. but both should work on punches n set ups n get a bit more creative Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-25 07:59:44

Thanks heaps for the advice guy :) I have only just started raping and I'm really trying to improve faster Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-07-25 08:04:51

not bad by both, one edged it by a margin. good battle Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-25 20:18:03

Both were hard to read. No lie, One seemed to have a better idea on how to set up a punch giving him my vote. Both need work on wording, delivery/flow and structure. Multies aren't everything and try to stay away from rhyming things together just because they rhyme nah mean. Overall one had more idea's/attempts etc then the other. Hmu if a better expo is needed. G'luck to both & keep at it. Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-26 00:17:21

In this battle I felt both could have came a lot harder but ive got my winner. The winner had better multis and punchs Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-26 12:15:36

need to work on the punches both no hate Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-26 13:18:31

SWISHER: Opening line blantant and not very creative. You changed up your rhymescheme way to fast and you were caping stuff that doesnt have anything to do with the Muti's. The first scheme was just 2 syllable's, The Stop, and Your bitch aint did not need to be capitalized... Few lines after that up to fine then was very weak punchwise. You need to bring concepts that can be directed at your opponent and be creative about it... The last half of your verse did not have one punch in it, the whole thing was talking about yourself and that gives you no credit toward this battle. Diss and throw punches at your opponent the whole through the battle. The first things you need to work on is your structure and making sure you are throwing punches the whole way through. Then start upping the concept, multi, flow game.. And so on from there... Exiled: First couple of lines stopping at Desert Eaag* is a bit off flow. Simplistic conceptually but can work good with a build up. Def don't let you multi syllable's go off like you did because this is what messed the flow up... "Traffic light and Havoc" line could have been worded alot better. I like the concept just work on rewording the set ups to them a little bit... The rest of the concept weren't working to much... Not much creativity in them... The very last multi' looked like you just cut off the rest of the line and left that there.. Don't do that shit either, post a complete verse. Def work on wording for better punch execution as well as your wording with your multi's to make the verse flow better and have a smoother read for the voters. Vote is in. Voted: SWISHER /
Posted on: 2012-07-26 14:57:50