EZ VOTE. NO HATE. FAIR IS TOSSED. Voted: J-Bear / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 18:24:30

FULL BREAKDOWN... J-BEAR : I dont really have to breakdown your verse into individual parts cuz all the way through it lacked punches.. You have to be direct and attack your opponent and also some of your concepts were just awful or weird as fuck so work on that also... Cap your multies and starting using set-ups to help build your punch....... ~SHINIGAMI~ : Your opener was ok but the shotgun concept is played and also wasn't worded right... I used the shotgun concept awhile back... And also your set-up wasn't to strong either but thats due to wording.. It seemed like you were trying to do to much with the set-ups.... Your constructive and feels this quake lines were nice but could have been worded better andm more complex with the set-ups but all around nice ideas... The tsunami hit lines were decent but your set-ups could have been stronger but it still flowed well... Your closer was somewhat weak... Not to good of concepts to begin with and your wording didn't help neither did your execution... Overall ok battle and votes based off of consistency... Voted: J-Bear / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 23:29:22

gota give it to shingami Voted: J-Bear / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-21 02:53:48

Bear: Verse wasn't attacking your opponent at all. I seen no punches. Read some other peoples battles and understand how you have to write when battling... SHIN: Opener was cool.. Rest of the punches were either to blantant or basic or a lil missworded, you were consistant with throwing them though. Voted: J-Bear / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-22 17:32:04

RAPPING ISNT JUST ABOUT DISSING! Y CANT U PEOPLEGET THAT! ITS ABOut thE FLOW AND GETTING SOME SORT OF POIONT ACROSS! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-22 22:20:34