FV Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 00:56:59

one just got Murdered lacking da use of multis,punches and scheme...please vote back fairly on my battle (: Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 01:15:55

polo Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 01:25:22

FULL BREAKDOWN... COOKIEMON : 1st off, cap your multies it helps with an easier read and second your opener was rather weak... You were just flowing you aint have no set-ups, your concepts were weak and you didn't even throw a punch.. Only thing going for you is your multies but that wont get you far.. Try getting more complex with your bars... The 'blistery' lines were also not good and everything i just said about your opener applies to these lines also so remember that... Your whole entire verse needs better concepts, stronger punches, set-ups, structure and way more complexity... ~SHINIGAMI~ : Your openers cool but I'm not entirely sure what your wordplay refers too but other then that 1st line everything else seemed a little below basic from your concepts to set-ups to execution your opener was not strong... The 'bangs with a flag' concept was nice but didn't hit to hard due to wording.. You had the right idea just didn't really execute strongly either... The connecting to spawn line was decent but should of had more to it but it was still nice... Your closer was weak.. It lacked creativity like some of your previous lines had.. Be more creative with your lines like the connecting to spawn... If your consistent with creative and well worded lines like that then you'll be the shit... Also concepts need to be fresh and your set-ups and execution have to be strong.. Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 04:40:32

fv Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 05:06:19

Polo.....!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-20 12:49:28

PUNCHES AND CONSISTENCY TOOK THIS NO FURTHER EXPO OR BREAKDOWN NEEDED. Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 15:45:32

awesome Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-20 16:07:48

Cookie: to start off your flow was a bit choppy and you had very very little in there that can even be directed towards your opponent. You have to throw punches to win battles, so my suggestion is to work on being consistant throwing a punch every line or bar, and then working on the other things and taking the next step up.... SHINI: Opener.. Build up was kinda ehh. Laughing at the "lesbian midget" line though... "bangs with a flag" was a good concept, I was not feeling the way you finished that off though... Closing line had a nice lil flow to it and was smooth, a horrorcore typa play.. Alright way to close it out, just lacked a bit on the creative end... Votes in. Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-21 17:51:52

Fv no H8 call it how I read it Voted: CookieMon / ~SHINIGAMI~
Posted on: 2012-06-23 00:00:03