i should hav never read this he just told me the ending to hunger gamez... Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:15:48

lol - mah bad dude Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:16:41

fitzy didn you learn the first time ? lol j/k good luck yo Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:39:43

reppin TRDZ ...peace Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:40:43

you cant spell turdz w/o trdz Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:42:52

haha peace homes Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:46:10

peace brutha Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:47:23

TRDZ is my crew son Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:47:24

I know just messin w/cha mayn Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:48:10

hahaha Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-06-14 14:50:25

FV noh8 LOVE THIS LINE A yo. . I do it big pushin LIDS N TONS OF GRAINS n his simple QUIPS ARE FUN TO TAME so I kill his ass like the KIDS IN HUNGER GAMES Voted: Letum / fitzy4life07
Posted on: 2012-06-14 15:00:12

ok ok Voted: Letum / fitzy4life07
Posted on: 2012-06-14 17:12:37

FULL BREAKDOWN... UNYQE : I do it big pushin LIDS N TONS OF GRAINS n his simple QUIPS ARE FUN TO TAME so I kill his ass like the KIDS IN HUNGER GAMES!!!.... Your multies were pretty good... Your set-up to the hunger games punch wasn't as strong as it should of been cuz it needed more to it but your execution was still decent... Your concept was also decent but your wording could have been better.... Sooo if its a FIGHT THEN I ASK YA make sure he's read his last RIGHTS FROM A PASTOR cuz this fagget couldn make me see a star at NIGHT IN ALASKA!!!.... Honestly you should try being a little more complex with your set-ups cuz their a little basic but you have no trouble executing them but executing a basic set-up equals a basic punch... Your concepts were pretty decent and your multies were still good but you should alter your structure.... The Mic?? I'm ICEN WHEN ITS MINE to leave em hunched SLICING UP HIS SPINE then start DICING UP HIS MIND sooo its safe to say I knocked em out like TYSON IN HIS PRIME!!!.... Nothing to strong, still pretty basic... Your multies were good but everything from your set-ups to your concept to your execution to your structure was basic... Creativity in a strong set-up will help executing a strong punch.... And if he still thinks his AMPS WARMER?? Let this CHAMP WARN YA i fold this bitch up quicker then TRANSFORMERS!!.... Decent closer, not to strong but not to weak... Your consistency is there but your wording and set-ups need to be more complex... Your multies were decent and you had an all around good verse but you can do better.... FITZY4LIFE07 : ur a RAT ur a BITCH ur just the DEFONISHION ov a fukin SNITCH ur gona be found DEAD in a fukin ditch u ILLITARATE prick wit ur UNDEVELOPED DICK.... Not a good opener to be honest... This lacks a lot of things... Your multies were below basic and concepts weren't good at all... No type of set-up so your basically just flowing... Your execution was weak due to your choice of words and concepts and the lack of set-ups... QUESTIONIN UR UNDERLINED PACKAGE IM A SAVAGE i quickly RAVAGE wit the untold DAMAGE fuk hunger games feel my PSYCOTIC RAGE and embrass my SKIZOFRENICK FAZE CRAZED... You did not pick it up at all... Your structure is off and everything i said about your previous lines also apply to these cuz your lacking complexity, set-ups and execution and also you seem to be capitalizing unnecessary things... Try looking at some vets battles to see what it takes... bloods rushen true my VEINS dreamin ov dismemberin ur FACE and DISGRACEN 12 GAUGE RACEN no paysunts fuk the ALTENASIONS.... A lot of typos.. Nothing special like your previous lines... Once again what i said still applies.. Try being a little more creative and structure your verse differently cuz its not a good look... in this rap natsions CONSISTEN ov alot ov faken gangland abreveasions claimen satan 187ens ill be CREATIN rockin u LOCATSION LIRICLY RAPEN and SHOT GUN BLAZEN.... Not a good choice of words at all and still there are plenty typos... You were just flowing for real and thats good n all but you wanna attack your opponent more so try to make most of your lines directed (in a dissing manner) towards your opponent and also more complex and structured better... Votes based off of consistency... Voted: Letum / fitzy4life07
Posted on: 2012-06-15 23:20:42

One had better punches, and Fitz, I didn't take into account the spelling errors. You still had some pretty good stuff. Voted: Letum / fitzy4life07
Posted on: 2012-06-16 03:46:21