I'm going to break this down bar for bar because this battle needs it. One, it's pretty close (but not in a good way). And two, so much shit is forced/stretched/pla yed or just doesn't make sense and it needs to be brought to your attention. [[Vice Ve®sa]]: The "dope line" punches are all played. Including this one.. if you want to flip that phrase, then make it WAY outside of the box or don't try it at all. Again, "boos/booze" punches are terribly played.. especially the way you used it. Hell, I've used it before, only because I knew my opponent was pure trash, and a trash punch could beat him. You put dickheads in a box.. so hoes oughta smirk? I get it, you kill him. But hoes oughta smirk, why.. because dicks in boxes are funny? Eh, that's hella off topic. The IV's punch.... could have gone places but here's your problem. You say "blew IV's". I get that IV is the roman numeral for 4. Your problem is that you're trying to make Fo (a gun) relate to IV (the numeral). It works in your head, but it is a horrible punch on paper, because you have to say "blew IV's" out loud... and no gun is called an IV. So that attempt at "blasting guns" wordplay failed. Then when you tried to tie it into Hov's daughter, it didn't make sense either. Yeah, it's her name (going off your facts. I have no clue..) but since your wordplay didn't match in the first half of that line, it didn't match in the latter either... it's just her name.. no wordplay. Music is major / doin em favors are filler multies. You ain't doin em favors? Why would you do him favors in the first place?? Irrelevant filler. Followed by more filler with "pest skills / pest kills". You have the skills of a pest? Come on, dude. Yes, I get it.. nuisance and pest go together. But you're saying your pest skills bring a new sense to haters.. you aren't saying a damn thing here. Next we have "artery deuce".. first, WTF do you mean deuce? That isn't a verb. Are you trying to say you'll split them in two, making them deuced? If so, it isn't hard hitting and it's only purpose is to sound like "art a reduce" to setup your last punch, which was your hardest punch by far, which barely made sense. (Go tell someone you'll give their "art a reduce" in a battle and watch them blankly stare at you). Last line was very awkwardly worded: "pull strings to face a beat down?" To face something means to encounter something.. so if you're facing a beat down, you're the one being given the beat down. Not only that, but "acoustic debators??" Acoustic matches strings.. got it. A beat down (you meant a face off) matches debators.. got it. But what the fuck is an acoustic debator? Someone who argues over guitars? Dude, don't make shit up to finish a punch.. and only make it up if we'll get a laugh out of it or something. [[darko]]: First off, if you're capping words for EMPHASIS, then do your thing. If you're capping words BECAUSE THEY SHARE A RHYME SCHEME, then you're way off in SEVERAL places. You're Australian, not British.. so "man in a skirt" does not rhyme with "watching the smurfs". There's no soft "a" in the pronunciation of "man" as far as you and I are concerned. Also, Smurfette is capped for no reason. "Flippin over ya verse like a polar shift in reverse" - Huh? Why does the polar shift have to be in reverse for this punch to work? Polar shifts only fuck with polarities.. cause disaster and whatever.. so this isn't good wordplay at all since you're only playing with the word "flipped" and nothing more. Although, the reversed inner rhyme of flippin-over and polar-shift-in was very clever. (Yeah I caught it ;) He strings multies like he's watching the smurfs.. smurfette at his worst? Pure filler dude, seriously. WTF do multies have to do with the Smurfs? What does he have to do with a Smurf? Nothing outside of the rhyme scheme you've forced him in. So, gargamel words created this nerd... doesn't make sense, and doesn't attack him at all. More filler. Your content relates to other content in your verse, but it isn't saying anything. It's just relating. Biblical slurs doesn't match anything in your verse because Jesus isn't a slur.. nor is calling him a son/sun. Entrepreneur doesn't match your rhyme scheme at all, and doesn't fit anywhere in your verse.. you create your own job? Hmm. Also, the Jesus punch was junk.. it's based on a nonsense belief system that everyone knows as false.. and it's really only saying that he isn't hot. Nothing more. Calling his verse scribbles would've been okay if it were tied to something creative, but Parkinson's regional manager? Yeah, you shake with Parkinson's.. but who the fuck is Parkinson's Regional Manager, what do they have to do with this verse? Why does a disease have a regional manager? Again, wording is hella off dude. He can't get a free manicure because he's shaking? Who said anything about a manicure? More filler.. the only lip he gives is glandular fever? So anything that touches his lips gets sick? That isn't even a diss.. hell, that's a compliment. Then you end it with more forced shit.. calling him Link (wrong name) JUST to rhyme Ocarina with the rest of the scheme.. which wasn't a punch at all. If you're saying "it ain't a game, you're just getting fucked" then you worded that horribly, dude. If you both want brutal honesty, these were both shit verses. You've both done far better than this. FAR BETTER. I guess since so much shit was off with both verses, the winner gets this with a better flow and a smoother rhyme scheme, because beyond that... there isn't really anything to judge. Posted on: 2012-01-16 16:13:08

Wow, I think I win the most detailed vote award. I didn't realize I wrote that much.. Posted on: 2012-01-16 16:16:16

Trash/Retarded comments removed... Posted on: 2012-01-17 14:33:00

this was a pretty decent enough spar... Felt one made more of an impact with there verse than the other's. Fair is in... "LBG" Posted on: 2012-01-17 14:34:38

4'S/FO's = IV (Roman Numeral)...Blew/Blu = BLU IVY That JayZ Daughters name || Pest & Change = Nuisance & New Cents (DOUBLE PUNCH) || "Artery Deuce / Art a Reduce"...Excuse me the Typo of me Spelling Deuce in the Battle...DPS Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-01-15 02:35:13

Link is from the Legend of Zelda Ocarina of time; Parkinson's is a disease in which you cant stop shaking; The Astrotheological belief is that JESUS is the actual SUN in the sky; The Polar-Shift is the even in which both the northern and southern hemisphere switch, causing sea levels to rise, disaster etc..; Glandular Fever is a kissing deisease; The SMURFS was a movie but an older cartoon, in which SMURFETTE was the only FEMALE, and GARGAMEL was the only VILLAIN and was the person who CREATED smurfette. With intentions to overtake the smurf village but the overwhelming SMURF way of life turned smurfette GOOD. enjoy :D GB UC Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-01-15 03:26:41

Hot!!!! pm for expo Voted: Phracture / galactus86
Posted on: 2012-01-15 04:10:29

one had nice multis but poor execution. u got potential. just clean up ya verse and be more original. the other just won this wit cleaness. fv. Voted: Phracture / galactus86
Posted on: 2012-01-15 11:31:50

i am original.. Ive been a stage emcee for 4 years writing longer champ, just not on this site.. i try to keep the versatility up, with a creative mind; i always go outside the box but think what you will, i see more creativeness throughout my bars than most emcees here, you should be telling them to be original bro, NOT ME. NH peace. cheers for the opinion! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-01-15 11:42:44

Fairness is in. Ones punchs overwhelmed the others. Multies were iight. 'Nuff said. :high: Voted: Phracture / galactus86
Posted on: 2012-01-15 21:05:04

I honestly thought one was gonna get murked but it was actually closer than I thought. The loser needs some work on his multis and punches. He has a lotta potential too. The winner I felt like some of his wordplay didn't really connect with the punches in the beginning but then picked it up half way in his verse which was enough for me to get it. Fairs dropped. Respect it 👌 Voted: Phracture / galactus86
Posted on: 2012-01-15 21:15:41

GB Voted: Phracture / galactus86
Posted on: 2012-01-16 13:51:20