Where The Fuxx My Last Line?? Comment Only
Posted on: 2011-08-21 00:30:23

gb fv vb yall Voted: BFNE CEO™ / Lizman
Posted on: 2011-08-21 00:41:01

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Posted on: 2011-08-21 00:41:48

One came a bit harder and had a better introduction for me, want a better expo hit me up. Voted: BFNE CEO™ / Lizman
Posted on: 2011-08-21 01:38:55

One was more complex, but the other was slightly more entertaining. The one that was entertaining had a bit more swag but his punches were simple and he rapped in fragments. He repeated a couple of concepts, and I didn't think his use of multies were as effective as they could have been either. The one who was more complex had more internal rhyme schemes and metaphors, but he didn't use references that most people would relate to, so it made his complexity lack entertainment. This one will boil down to personal preference—the verse that's more entertaining, or the one that's more complex. I'm not trying to be mean, so don't take this the wrong way guys. This is one man's constructive criticism and I'm pretty sure there are others who would look at the verses and see the same thing. By a slight edge... Voted: BFNE CEO™ / Lizman
Posted on: 2011-08-21 14:22:11

hall: rhymes are a bit basic. first half of it flowed pretty well and I liked how you kept the same scheme through it. The longer you keep the same scheme and still throw hard punches the better the verse and your ability looks. So Up your complexity and improve on concept with one scheme = Dopeness. overall the punches that you did have weren't really creative have to throw some original simile's n meta's in there. the other half was pretty much just straight rhymes for the most part... Liz: Opener was alright. Again like your last battle the wording was a bit off.. It just wasn't a smooth read. the 'pricks balls' line was okay, kept the consistancy but was a bit played. Closing lines were good but there was no real ending.. I felt it was all building up to a punch and didn't finish. Overall like i said before you have good concept, I feel your complexity gets in the way of you taking your verse to the next level. It kinda keeps the flow a bit choppy and isn't a smooth read all the way through. Many times in your verse's voters have to stop and read stuff over and over to figure it out because of the way you word it. It should be straight destroying your opponent not figuring our riddles and shit, Ya feel me. Either way. I have a winner. Votes in. Voted: BFNE CEO™ / Lizman
Posted on: 2011-08-22 19:52:23

SandMan Vote. Do Yo ever battle good dudes? Voted: BFNE CEO™ / Lizman
Posted on: 2011-08-22 20:13:42